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Try a lot of different things in a month by Mutt Cutts



PHA2016 39 / 38  
Sep 26, 2016   #1
Matt Cutts shared which his experience after reading a book from American philosopher. Matt, Technologist at Google talked the story of his life in the past. He told to audience that his live change after he read that book. In lecture session, Matt shared that some activities that we should do in thirty days. There are cycling to work, jogging a thousand per day and writing novel. Mutt always feel confidence by those activities. Day by day, he spend time at cycling, hiking Kilimanjaro mountain in Africa, and writing a novel. Mutt wrote a novel more less fifty thousand words per days only a month. It was amazing. The last session, Mutt believe that people have occasion to do best things in life.

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rosadesiana 38 / 38  
Sep 26, 2016   #2
Hi PHA,
you have done a great job !
here are my suggestions

==> Matt Cutts shared which his experience after readinghe read a book ...
Matt, Technologist at Google talkedshared athe story of his ...

==> He told to audience that his livehas been changedchange after he ...

==> In lecture session, Matt shared(you could tell the story directly and not repeating the same point)

==> There are cycling to work , (i do not get what is the point) jogging a thousand per ...

Day by day, he spend time at cycling, hiking Kilimanjaro ...
Mutt wrote a novel more less fifty thousand ... (you are talking about the past so please use past tense only)

The last session, Mutt believeS that people have ...

keep writing !!


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