IELTS: unemployment rate comparaison between US and Japan mar.93-mar.99

This line chart compare the unemployement rate between Japan and US.

Overall, the US unemployement is decreased over the years, while the japanese line is globally increasing.

More precisely, the US unemployement rate was more than 2 times superior than the Japanese rate in March 93, reaching 6,5% for the former one, and 3% for the final one. With some fluctuations, US unemployement dropped to 5,5% in 2 years, whereas the Japanese rate rose to 3,6%. This last one continued to grow and reached 4,4% until early of 96.

Americans without a job rate rose in the middle of March but went back down to the rate of the previous year on march 96. Then, a dramatic decrease of the Japanese rate is shown during March 96, but this trend changed with a continuous increased of unemployement from around May 96 upwards.

The US line remained steady woth some fluctuations from 96 to 99, during wich met the Japanese rate with 5% of unemployement .

PS: I think that I should use more the horizon's datas (date) than the line (unemployment rate)... I would be more clear maybe.

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which tense that you want to use here, be consistent because it could make the readers confuse,

*be careful with the using of the tense, in which paragraph you should use present tense or past tense

I cannot get your idea with these words. Perhaps, you wanna mention with and which. If I right, those are misspelling.

... the chart does not compare, but you do compare. The chart only presents trends ;

The line chart presents the details of unemployment rates of the US and Japan during the period of 1993 to 1999.
It is important that you mention the time periods if any such periods are involved with the graphical presentation. It should be mentioned in the introduction itself.

Overall, the US unemployement israte has decreased over the years, while the japanese lineunemployment rate has increasedis globally increasing.

I think you had better write 4 paras.

One for paraphrasing.

One for 2 main features.

Two for 2 details each.

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