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TOEFL- UNIVERSITY STUDENTS SHOULD ATTEND CLASSES OR NOT?


alice0209 12 / 18 12  
Aug 13, 2013   #1
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It's not necessary for university students to attend class as long as they can pass their examinations.


In university education, students are given much independence in the ways of learning. Some students still rely on classes to keep up with the courses, while some students don't feel the need to attend classes because they believe that they can handle the exams. These different ideas of learning methods lead to a question whether it is necessary for university students to attend the class as long as they can pass their examinations. In my opinion, I believe that students should always attend class no matter what the outcome of the exam is.

First, in terms of learning, attending class is more effective than simply studying alone to pass the exams. Classes are designed diligently for the students and professors absolutely bear more knowledge than the students. Professors not only have the knowledge, but also equip with experiences, knowing how to guide their students toward their academic achievements.

Second, it's students' basic responsibility to attend class. Attending class is the most persuasive way for the students to show respect to the professor as well as themselves. Many professors grade their students with class attendances. In other words, class attendances are regarded as critical as examination performances. Those who even achieve high scores on exams could fail if they didn't show up in the classes.

Some people might argue that if students already understand the contents on the class enough to pass the exams or they can study the course on their own, why wasting time going to classes? Doesn't self-study more efficient? However, in my opinion, this is a rather immodest way of thinking. I believe that professors can always give students more than students themselves could because of the experiences and their qualifications as professors. Besides, even if students believe that they are so brilliant to surpass their professors, they can still go to the classes to discuss with professors and classmates.

In conclusion, students can learn more thoroughly as well as showing respect for professors and themselves through attending classes. It's an essential learning process. Passing the exams is not the terminal purpose of learning. The learning process itself, however, is the most important and powerful way of evaluating a student.

p.s: I really care about the content of my essay. Please tell me if I made the clear point to the topic and whether my arguments and explanation are strong, thanks!!:)

testtaker 6 / 20 4  
Aug 13, 2013   #2
Hi alice0209,
Your essay is really good to read. However, I have some observations.

I think your second point is not much persuasive. Do we attend classes to show respect for professors? You might have a different opinion but (in my opinion) introducing a more convincing point would strengthen your essay.

I think your first and third paragraph are saying almost the same thing. It's about the experience of professors that the students lack. I was feeling like I was reading the same thing twice!

Thanks.
Pahan 1 / 1,907 553  
Aug 13, 2013   #3
Good introduction :)

First, in terms of learning, attending class is more effective than simply studying alone to pass the exams.

This is not your reason. This you mentioned in the introduction too. So start the paragraph with the reason that justifies your position;

Classes are designed diligently for the students and professors absolutely bear more knowledge than the students.

.... this is the one. You need to begin the para with this idea to give more prominence to your reason.
Also, give a specific example to show that students' interaction with the professors help them develop their knowledge and exposure.
OP alice0209 12 / 18 12  
Aug 13, 2013   #4
To Pahan

Thanks a lot for your advice! But I don'y quite get your point.
Why my first sentence in the second paragraph can't stand as the first reason?I don't think that I've mentioned the effectiveness of attending classes in the introduction. In the first reason I want to point out attending class is more effective than simply studying alone to pass the exams so I put it in the first sentence. So maybe it isn't clear enough or...?

Thanks again for your help!
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Aug 14, 2013   #5
Well, in this line you say studying in groups is more effective than studying alone. This is your position on the argument suggested by your prompt. Why do you think so? The answers for that question are the reasons that you use to justify your position. What Pahan suggested is that you need to start with one of such reasons to avoid repeating your claim on your opinion. I think that's a good advice because it makes your essay sound more productive.
ramshah 11 / 27 5  
Aug 18, 2013   #6
I think your content is good and well developed, but you'd better use the topic sentences of your paragraphs in the introduction paragraph so that your essay become more well organized.


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