Task 1: University subjects chosen, 2005.

The bar chart illustrates the number of male and female students chosing certain university topis in the specific 2005.
It is clear that the number of students chosing social sciences in university was highest in all 8 subjects. Remarkably, the number of men was higher than that of women in the sciences, mathematics, law, literature, the opposite was true for the others in 2005.

The number of males selecting sciences in university was twice as high as that of females, at about 22 and 11 thousand people respectively, compared to nearly 19 thousand men joining mathematics were high fourfold the number of women, at roughly 4 thousand. For literature and law class, the number of males was more than the number of females at about from 4 to 5 million people.

It is remarkable that Social Sciences was the most attractive to women students, with around 24 thousand students, compared to about 18 million females and 2 million males participating in the Languages class. While the number of women joining the humanities class was equal the figure for men, at about 11 million, the arts lesson was taken part in by most of female.

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Apart from ''the number of '',you also can use ''the amount of '' to make your graph more different.

You have a few spelling errors in the essay that call attention to your lack of English spelling ability ( chosing = choosing, topic = topics). The summary overview is not complete as it does not indicate:

- the 8 subjects
- the measurement type

The overview should represent all of the pertinent information that will be used for the comparison discussion. So when you neglect to inform the reader about the 8 subjects, which were indicated in the chart, you are not delivering complete information to the reader. Remember, you are scored on the accuracy of your report. So make sure you identify and include all related information in the overview portion.

The task 1 test is a direct data reporting essay. Therefore, you should not be offering an opinion such as "It is remarkable..." Just report on the data as presented in the essay. You are not writing an opinion essay, which is what the Task 2 essay represents. Don't make opinions in task 1 essays.

Try to avoid using the Oxford comma in these task 1 presentations. That is how you lower your GRA score. You end up creating run-on instead of complex sentences. Always use a period to indicate the start of a new sentence with related information. Formulate the sentence in a complex manner rather than simply trying to string together the information in one presentation. The criteria for a paragraph indicates a 3-5 sentence presentation. Using only 2 sentences means you are not properly formatting the paper, even if you do meet the word count requirement.