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USA Oil Energy Need: Projection Until 2030


sir99 7 / 8 2  
Jan 20, 2016   #1
The graph below gives information from Annual Energy Outlook 2008 about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projection until 2030.

The bar chart illustrates amount of energy resource spent in US during 1980-2030 and is measured by quadrillion units. At first glance, all of fuel consumption have increased perpetually. Three fuel-petrol oil, natural gas, and coal-were chosen as the main energy resource since 1980 and this circumstance has foreseen will be remain in 2030; the three others fuel-nuclear, solar/wind, and hydropower-have experienced the same circumstance, but as the least consumed energy.

There were three majority energy resource in US consumed in first period, namely petrol and oil, natural gas, and coal, at 35 quadrillion units, 20 quadrillion units, and approximately 15 quadrillion units respectively. Even though there have been a slight fluctuation, those have been regarded will be increase significantly at the last period, petrol and oil at around 49 quadrillion units, solar and oil at near 32 quadrillion units, and natural gas at about 25 quadrillion units. During that period, petrol and oil and natural gas have intercepted each other.

Move to the three less common consumed fuel, nuclear, solar/wind, and hydropower, 1980 depicted that those were consumed approximately 3 quadrillion units. Afterwards, need in those three energy have been increased slightly, and the same tendency has been predicted will be an insignificant increase until 2030, nuclear at around 8 quadrillion units, solar at approximately 6 quadrillion units, and hydropower at about 3 quadrillion units.




Mardy17 32 / 18 5  
Jan 20, 2016   #2
Hai Sir99
Please pay attention to put determiner (THE, A, or AN) on your writing. :)
Several nouns or noun phrases on your writing seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.
1. THE amount =>

...The bar chart illustrates amount of energy resource...

2. THE US =>

... spent in US during 1980-2030...

There were three majority energy resource in US

3. THE FUEL =>

... all of fuel consumption have increased perpetually

Next, be careful using a hyphen (-)

Three fuel-petrol oil, natural gas, and coal-were chosen

the three others fuel-nuclear, solar/wind, and hydropower-have experienced

Why must you put the hyphen there? I think it will give different meaning if you put it there, since the words which connected with that mark being one word.

Finally, I find several grammatical error.

and this circumstance has foreseen will be remain in 2030;

"Be" and "Remain" are verbs. Here the alternative to explain it.
and this circumstance IS FORECAST TO REMAIN STABLE in 2030.

Even though there have been a slight fluctuation, those have been regarded will be increase significantly at the last period,

AND AGAIN!! "be" and "Increase"

THANKS A BUNCH


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