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IELTS Task 2 : Using electronic calculators in school


Fardhani Putri 23 / 46 7  
Feb 4, 2014   #1
Some people believe that electronic calculators should not be allowed in school until after the pupils have mastered metal aritmetic. Others believe that calculators save pupils time, especially with complicated calculations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, technology is used by people not only in the workplace but also in the school, take example electronic calculators. Several people think that the electronic calculators should not allowed in school before they understand about mathematics. Critics claim that calculators can help students to solve the complicated calculation. In my view, using electronic calculators for students make them will hard to understand to solve the mathematics problem by their own knowledge. In this passage, we will discuss both of views.

Mathematics is a complicated subject in the school, as we know it consists of arithmetic's, algebra, and trigonometrics. Students demand to understand how to solve the problem in mathematics with their own knowledge and not with calculators so it trains them to do their next exam. For example, teacher should teach the students about how solve the complicated number like trignometrics and they can answer it with the right way. Furthermore, with their own knowledge they can be diligent to study and enhance their ability about mathematics because they know how to explain the answer which they get. Thus, students can do their exam well without calculators and it affects their future to become more intelligence.

From the opposite statement that pupils can use calculators to solve the problem in mathematics. The reasons are it can save much time for student to do their task about complicated calculation. For instance, some students avoid arithmetic's and algebra in their subject because it is not easy to solve with their own, it need calculators which have tools and key points to do their task. Then, it makes easier for students to answer the difficult question about complicated calculations.

One on the whole, it can be tolerate for some students to use electronic calculators but not in the long term, maybe just in several material which students cannot solve it. Then, their teacher should teach more about how to solve the difficult calculations so the students do their task not depend on calculators but by their own knowledge because it will give benefit for their career in the future.

dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Feb 4, 2014   #2
Nowadays, technology is used by people not only in the workplace but also in the school, take example electronic calculators.

... without the latter part it makes a very good hook :)
This is my suggestion;
Nowadays, technology is used by people not only in the workplace but also in the schools as well. Usage of electronic calculators to perform arithmetic in schools is a fine example for this trend.

SeveralSome people think that the electronic calculators should not allowed in school before they understand about mathematics.

CriticsOthers claim that calculators can help students to solve the complicated calculations

In this passage, we will discuss both of views.

This line does not add any value to your essay. You better conclude your intro with a statement expressing your opinion. However, you still can discuss both views in your body paras.
sabakhai 5 / 11  
Feb 4, 2014   #3
In my view, using electronic calculators for students make themwillIT hard for them to understand and to solve the mathematics problem by their own knowledge.
indah_hai 19 / 38 4  
Feb 4, 2014   #4
Hi Fardhani,

I like the way you made you writing. It is simple, and you can make it flows.
Indeed you have some grammar mistaken, which most of them are mentioned and solved by Dumi and other commentators, but honestly I want to make my writing as simple as yours.

Maybe sometimes you can read mine, and give me idea or some problem solving in my writing.
Good Job, Fardhani.
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,195 459  
Feb 4, 2014   #5
Hi Fardhani Putri,

it can be tolerate for

Word suggests this should be tolerated

From the opposite statement that pupils can use calculators to solve the problem in mathematics.

From the opposite statement (a comma) that pupils can use calculators to solve the problem in mathematics.

several materialS which students cannot solve it

some students avoid arithmetic's and algebra in their subject because it isthey are not easy to solve with their own (stop here) it needS calculators which have tools and key points to do their task.

they can be diligent to study

they study diligently

they can answer it with the right way.

they can figure out the answers properly

Pay particular attention to grammatical mechanics.

Thanks.
MLeonov - / 1  
Feb 4, 2014   #7
try to replace the verb "to use" with other verbs. Of course, your text is easy to understand but it looks very simple


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