Various household goods between 2001 and 2008 - Dynamic bar chart - IELTS WARRIOR

The graph shows the percentage of households in one country that had various goods between 2001 and 2008.
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of 8 distinct items used by households in a single nation from 2001 to 2008.

Overall, most categories saw an upward trend throughout the period, except for telephone use. The most significant gap was in the percentage of households that had mobile phones.

In terms of the first five predominant groups, the rate of telephone usage, which was the highest figure at the beginning, experienced a slight decline of 5% by 2008. Additionally, in 2001, the proportion of households with a microwave was 10% higher than that of CD players, but by 2008, both figures had risen to 90%. During the same period, the share of households owning mobile phones increased fourfold, while the total number of home computers doubled.

Concerning the remaining categories, there was a marginal climb of one-tenth in the number of clothes dryers in households from 2001 to 2008. Furthermore, while only 10% of families had access to the Internet and dishwashers in 2001, both items became much more common by 2008, with figures climbing to 60% and 40%, respectively.
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I aim for a solid 6.5 in both writing tasks 1 and 2. Can you evaluate my essay so that I can estimate my current level?
I appreciate to your help.
Mr Calma

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The summary overview is supposed to comprise at least a 3 sentence paragraph. The contents of that paragraph should include, an enumeration of the items for comparison, the measurement unit used, and the trending statement. The trending statement is not considered its own paragraph. It gets a proper score when properly integrated into the summary overview.

While your fluency in English is conversational at most times, your reports tend to get confusing because you are working on only your vocabulary score instead of the ease of understanding that the reader should have with each paragraph. Do not focus on language use alone, creating an overly complex sentence each time leads to difficulty in tracking the information within the paragraph for the reader.