'How I viewed Islamic missionaries' - personal essay

Actually i needed to add the following para to my personal essay but i cannot write my thoughts fluently and convincingly on the paper...so kindly refine it ...in 2nd para, i have tried to describe a mosque but cant exactly describe it so help me with that....help is also required in the third para

I had viewed Islamic missionaries as a recruiting arm for militants-a stance which seriously offended my friend, Ali. He insisted that I spend a week with the missionaries before forming any opinion regarding them.

Upon constant insistence.I set out on a religious journey of 10 days with a team of 12 members. Our team was sent to a far flung area of Pakistan.

As we reached our destination, we used a mosque, located at the centre of the town, as our base. The condition of mosque was pitiful. The walls were made of mud-brick, prayer hall was uncovered and floor was uneven on which we were supposed to sleep. There was no electricity which meant that the team spent hours without fans in hot weather. Also, as there was no gas supply, we had to buy gas cylinders to cook food.

During our first day of stay, everyone was told his role. I was selected as the preacher for the last 5 days. I was hesitant to accept the post not because I feared confronting people but because i, myself, was not convinced of the stance that i was supposed to preach others: the role of religious teams was to encourage people to enjoin good. However, as I could not run away with the task assigned, I spent more and more time with the members to learn about their stance. Ultimately, I did a pretty handsome job at encouraging people-whom I preached- to practice tolerance and good.

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Upon constant insistence.I set out on a religious journey of 10 days with a team of 12 members. Our team was sent to a far flung area of Pakistan.

As we reached our destination, we used a mosque, located at the centre of the town, as our base. The condition of mosque was pitiful. The walls were made of mud-brick, prayer hall was uncovered and floor was uneven on which we were supposed to sleep. There was no electricity which meant that the team spent hours without fans in hot weather. Also, as there was no gas supply, we had to buy gas cylinders to cook food.

I will try to edit this part for you, I hope this helps!

My friend continued to influence me to open my mind. I set out on a religious journey of 10 days with a team of 12 members. Our team was sent to a remote area of Pakistan.

When we reached our destination, we used a mosque, located at the center of the town, as our base. The living conditions of the mosque was pitiful. The walls were made of mud-brick, the prayer hall was uncovered and the floor was uneven on which we were supposed to sleep. There was no electricity, which meant that the team spent hours without fans in hot weather. Also, as there was no gas supply, we had to buy gas cylinders to cook food.

During our first day of stay, everyone was told his role. I was selected as the preacher for the last 5 days. I was hesitant to accept the post not because I feared confronting people but because i, myself, was not convinced of the stance that i was supposed to preach others: the role of religious teams was to encourage people to enjoin good. However, as I could not run away with the task assigned, I spent more and more time with the members to learn about their stance. Ultimately, I did a pretty handsome job at encouraging people-whom I preached- to practice tolerance and good.

On our first day, everyone was told his role. I was selected as the preacher for the last 5 days. I was hesitant to accept the position. I did not fear leading people,however I was not confident of the dogma that i was supposed to preach to others: the role of religious teams was to encourage people to do good. However, as I could not run away with the task assigned, I spent more and more time with the members to learn about their stance. Ultimately, I did a pretty handsome job at encouraging people-whom I preached- to practice tolerance and good.