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Watching too much TV and violent images - essay



chauuyenbinh 2 / 4  
Jun 27, 2013   #1
Last week, I accidentally saw my cousin was watching violent show on TV. He is just eight years old so I force him to turn off the TV. I talk with his mother, and i realized that he predicted to TV. I think watching TV too much is not good for young children.

Watching too much make a bad affection to their healthy and behaviour. Young children do not take part in outdoor activities, instead of, they spend much time watching TV with junk food that make them easily to be obesity and not active. They just wach and hear the TV, but not commune with it. That habit lead to their bad communication with others. Watching TV too much also damage their eye sight. Recently, there are variety channels on tv, and most of them are not approxiate to children's age. Violent and sexual images appear many times on tv every day. Young children may less sensitive to the content of violence, and acceptviolence as a way to resolve life's difficulties or even imitate the violence they have seen. Some people have argued that lots of tv programs help children have a logical thinking and basis morality. Children also can study many useful things on tv so that they expect watching tv is not bad for young children. This may be true; however, if young children watching tv too much, parents can not supervise their children all the time. They can not know what contents their children has watched exactly to prevent.

Avowdedly, watching tv too much cause many negative influences for young children. Parents should permit their children watching tv about 2 hours a day, and remmember supervising the content they are waching. This is a good way to protect children from bad impacts.

Floence 1 / 1  
Jun 27, 2013   #2
He is just eight years old so I force him to turn off the TV.

He is only eight years old...

I think Just is too informal
Didgeridoo - / 289  
Jun 27, 2013   #3
Last week, I found my cousin watching a violent TV show . He is just eight years old, so I forced him to turn off the TV. I spoke with his mother, and I realized that he predicted to TV. I think that watching too much television is not good for young children. [For a more formal essay, use full words like "television" instead of the short version, "TV." However, it is OK to use TV every now and then, especially if you find yourself writing "television" many times.]
OP chauuyenbinh 2 / 4  
Jun 28, 2013   #4
thank you very much, Floence
OP chauuyenbinh 2 / 4  
Jun 28, 2013   #5
Thank Didgeridoo very much for help me a lots.
Nice to meet you.
Do you use facebook?
dumi 1 / 6793  
Jul 7, 2013   #7
What is the purpose of this writing? IELTS, TOEFL, GRE or any other? It's always good to mention the purpose so that you get more relevant feedbacks.

Generally, it is good to begin your essay with an introduction to your topic. If this is for IELTS or TOEFL, you should first introduce the given prompt to the reader.

I talked with his mother, and i realized that he predictedis addicted to watching TV.

..."predict" means for-seeing something that will happen in future. What you try to mean here is addiction ; that someone is enthusiastically devoted to something or some activity.
Pahan 1 / 1824  
Jul 7, 2013   #8
Watching?????? too much make a bad affectionimpact onto their healthy and behaviour.

.... watching what? .... Also, this has some grammar issues too.
Watching TV too often can have many negative effects, especially on young children.

. Young children do not take part in outdoor activities, instead of, they spend much time watching TV with junk food that make them easily to be obesitymake them become obese and notless active.

... interesting idea.... yes, you are right :)

They just wach and hear the TV, but not commune with it.

Watching TV make children less interactive


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