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IELTS: Water Cycle from the ocean to air and to the Earth surface



SHanafi 120 / 357  
Mar 11, 2014   #1
Hi, all. Please kindly check my writing. Thank you

The diagram below shows the water cycle which is the continuous movement of water on, above and below the surface of the Earth.
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The diagram describes the process of water cycle from the ocean to air and to the Earth surface which distinct in the three stages.

More clearly, evaporation appears as the first stage. The heat of sun condenses 80 per cent of sea water then reform it become cloud. Next, the result of evaporation process stimulates cloud to precipitate as the preparation of the next stage. Thus, the evaporate process makes cloud formation, the process continue to precipitate amount of water falls to the ground as the second stage.

After that, the rain water stored in the lakes and in the mountain summit as snow. Those kind of storage, water lake and snow, move along to return to the ocean, this is the third cycle stage. Moreover, while the groundwater stay in the impervious layer, the water movement keeps going through the line then the salt intrusion may affect seawater become salty; this is the of the third stage. Therefore, this cycle does continuously after water stance in the ocean.

sandipsinh 37 / 88  
Mar 12, 2014   #2
The heat of sun condenses 80 per cent of sea water then REFORMS IT INTO cloudS.
JasS 10 / 30  
Mar 12, 2014   #3
You didn't write "overview". it plays essential role in TASK 1, and it impacts on your IELTS score as well:)))) Don't Forget
dumi 1 / 6793  
Mar 13, 2014   #4
Hey... you need to upload the diagram. I have seen you've done this in other threads and I guess you know how to do that :)

The diagram describes the process of water cycle from the ocean to air and to the Earth surfacewhich comprises of three distinct in the three stages.

First, we need the diagram to make more meaningful comments. Also, you should have followed the same structure for this task too.
OP SHanafi 120 / 357  
Mar 13, 2014   #5
My apologize, this is the diagram : D


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eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1170  
Mar 14, 2014   #6
Moreover, while the groundwater stay in the impervious layer, the water movement keeps going through the line then the salt intrusion may affect seawater become salty; this is the of the third stage.

This is a lengthy sentence.
Possible revision: Moreover, while the groundwater stays in the impervious layer, the water movement keeps going through the line. This results salt intrusion which may affect seawater become salty, coming third stage.


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