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The process of water loop which happens both in the surface and inside of the earth.


nda18 46 / 81 9  
Nov 21, 2016   #1
The diagram illustrates the process of water cycle happened both in the surface and inside of the earth. Overall, it can be seen that the water circulation involves several steps beginning from the land to the sky and back again.

To begin with, the sun as the driver of the cycle, provides an energy to evaporate water from Earth's surface such as ocean, lake, and river. The plants also produce a vapour as a result of transpiration. The wind carries the vapours to the cooler temperature and condenses into tiny droplets in clouds. When the clouds meet the cooler temperature in the highland, the droplets become heavier and fall down as a precipitation.

After that, most of precipitation flows the downhill as and return to the river and the ocean. Some of them soaks into the ground and trapped in either the lake or rock as ground water. Eventually, this trapped water will also return to the ocean.




ibe13 36 / 50 9  
Nov 21, 2016   #2
Aloha, here is my thought;

[..] the process of water cycle (you can also say'water loop' ) [...]
To begin with, the sun as the driver of the cycle, provides an (do not use comma ) (the sun, the driver of the cycle process, provides [...] ) energy to evaporate water from the Earth's surface [...].

also, The plants also produce [...]. (you'd better use "also" in the beginning of sentence to keep your flow )
then, The wind carries the vapours [...]

OVERALL, YOU HAVE MINOR ERROR IN GRAMMAR, YET YOUR FLOW IS , SOMETIMES, NOT CONNECTED BETWEEN TWO SENTENCES. I BELIEVE THAT YOU CAN BE MORE IMPROVED BY MORE PRACTICE


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