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IELTS: Water Cycle from the ocean to air and to the Earth surface


SHanafi 120 / 415 93  
Mar 11, 2014   #1
Hi, all. Please kindly check my writing. Thank you

The diagram below shows the water cycle which is the continuous movement of water on, above and below the surface of the Earth.
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The diagram describes the process of water cycle from the ocean to air and to the Earth surface which distinct in the three stages.

More clearly, evaporation appears as the first stage. The heat of sun condenses 80 per cent of sea water then reform it become cloud. Next, the result of evaporation process stimulates cloud to precipitate as the preparation of the next stage. Thus, the evaporate process makes cloud formation, the process continue to precipitate amount of water falls to the ground as the second stage.

After that, the rain water stored in the lakes and in the mountain summit as snow. Those kind of storage, water lake and snow, move along to return to the ocean, this is the third cycle stage. Moreover, while the groundwater stay in the impervious layer, the water movement keeps going through the line then the salt intrusion may affect seawater become salty; this is the of the third stage. Therefore, this cycle does continuously after water stance in the ocean.

sandipsinh 37 / 90 3  
Mar 12, 2014   #2
The heat of sun condenses 80 per cent of sea water then REFORMS IT INTO cloudS.
JasS 10 / 30  
Mar 12, 2014   #3
You didn't write "overview". it plays essential role in TASK 1, and it impacts on your IELTS score as well:)))) Don't Forget
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Mar 13, 2014   #4
Hey... you need to upload the diagram. I have seen you've done this in other threads and I guess you know how to do that :)

The diagram describes the process of water cycle from the ocean to air and to the Earth surfacewhich comprises of three distinct in the three stages.

First, we need the diagram to make more meaningful comments. Also, you should have followed the same structure for this task too.
OP SHanafi 120 / 415 93  
Mar 13, 2014   #5
My apologize, this is the diagram : D



eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,208 476  
Mar 14, 2014   #6
Moreover, while the groundwater stay in the impervious layer, the water movement keeps going through the line then the salt intrusion may affect seawater become salty; this is the of the third stage.

This is a lengthy sentence.
Possible revision: Moreover, while the groundwater stays in the impervious layer, the water movement keeps going through the line. This results salt intrusion which may affect seawater become salty, coming third stage.
OP SHanafi 120 / 415 93  
Mar 25, 2014   #7
Hi, all. As my effort to improve my ability, I write this prompt repetitively. I am glad that you are willing to correct my newest. Thank you :D

The diagram below shows the water cycle which is the continuous movement of water on, above and below the surface of the Earth.
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The diagram demonstrates the natural process of water cycle which occurred in the below and surface of the Earth.

Overall, the hydrological cycle consists of stages in a regularly repeated order.

Closer to the diagrams, as the beginning of the stages, the sun heat causes an evaporation which reforms 80 percent of water vapor becoming clouds. While the temperatures cool down, such clouds make a formation and it will blown by the wind to the mountainous area to continue the following stages.

Simultaneously, low temperature in the mountain certainly precipitates the cloud formation to stimulate rain falls whereas the lake and some area in the top of mountain is served as natural reservoir. Moreover, as the water character, it absorbs from the surface of the earth and stays in the imperious layer as the water ground. As the particular process which distinct water two different movement, while ground water stay in the imperious layer, other water keeps going through to reach the ocean. Then, while such water facing nearly ocean, the salt intrusion may effects water become salty and also notes that the cycle will regularly repeated.





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