The well behaved and educated parents are the best teachers for their children. TOEFL independent

Hey,
I spent more than five minutes trying to figuring out the appropriate outline of this thirty-minutes essay. In all the TOEFL essays that I have read about agreeing or disagreeing essays, I have found that the writers agree or disagree totally with the statement. but I was wondering, what if I partially agree with the statement?

Could my essay for this question be correct?
I am waiting for your valuable feedbacks

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents are the best teachers. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Every child is born as a white paper. It is the role of his parents to make him a good or a bad person. Personally, I am inclined to I believe that parents are the best teachers if they are good people but if they are not they cannot be good teachers.

To begin with, in case parents are good and well educated people. They will arise their children to be well behaved.They will also implement in them good habits. For instance, personally, my parents instilled in me the love of reading books. When I was young, they used to read for me stories from different books genres. They also brought me a lot of books. This made me love studying and reading books which enabled me to learn a lot of things. This what makes parents to be the best teachers.

In case parents are not good or well educated people. They will not arise their offspring to be good individuals. They will not teach them good manners. On the contrary, in best cases, they will spoil them. For example, one of my neighbors has only one boy and loves so much which negatively affected him. She never taught him to depend on himself. She even does his school activities on his behalf. By doing this, she raised him on being more dependent on other people. This does not make her a good teacher.

By a way of conclusion, based on the reasons explored above, I am of the opinion that only the well behaved and well educated parents are the best teachers for their children.

Nour, you can only agree or disagree to a certain extent with an opinion in the prompt of the prompt asks you to do so. Do not make assumptions that you can only partially agree or disagree if the instructions do not indicate that you can do that. Therefore, you will lose some major points in this essay because your response does not totally follow the instructions you were given. You were asked to respond to the prompt in a specific manner, so there is not halfway point. Make a decision, take a side, and then discuss and defend it to the best of your abilities :-)

Remember that in a TOEFL test, your English comprehension skills, as well as your ability to follow instructions are being tested. That means that you will also be graded on your ability to understand and deliver on the directions you are given for different parts of the test. The scores are always based upon the ability of the test taker to deliver the expectations of the exam portion that they have been asked to work on.

So, if we were to compare your essay with the expected response to the prompt, the examiner will see that you have strong sense of logic and analysis. However, you have a problem with taking or following directions. The latter part will result in some major points being deducted from your final score.

In this case, you have a chance to change the essay you wrote because it is still a practice test. I suggest you do so before I make a final comment on the quality of your essay and the kind of grade that it might be getting. You only get a second chance during practice tests, so make the most of it :-)