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Essay about "What is work?"



Rajiv 55 / 398  
May 2, 2007   #1
when do our efforts succeed and when do they not.

a required exertion is necessary for us to consider anything as work, we may enjoy it too, and also, feel some necessity to bring about the outcome.

but when we are surrounded by the implements we will use, through which we will apply our effort, our mind at first stands aside and regards the proposed action.

just as the instruments and implements we will use, we have a measure of the skill we will bring, and it is to this that we become most committed in the action.

so, our mind has registered a plan, a path our action will follow, also, what we will look to avoid, and in recognizing the earliest indications of this negative effect lies a measure of our skill. Actually a large component of our skill lies in avoiding the unwanted from happening, which can perhaps happen in many ways.

an alertness to that occupies a large part of our mind and, it focuses on the emerging positive features as we apply our effort. like making our way on a less visible path through a forest when we have a sense of the direction, we will look out for danger, sometimes we will take a risk, but we are also looking for signs of other trails joining with ours, and always a glimpse through the space between branches for some familiar sighting.

when plunging through a forest the goal is to get out to the other side, out of the confinement of the trees, into the open. This paradigm is so similar to when, say, we are developing a software program in the workplace. Our manager who assigned us the task brings to us the sense of the trees, we have little choice to stay out, for that would enclose us within other trees, his disapproval becoming definitely in the nature of the trees - so we press on.

we are often asked to do things we feel ourselves uncertain of accomplishing, but through various coercions accept. we plunge in and almost from the start we have a sense of dependence on our manager, or a support group, both taking away from our self confidence. its not often easy to ignore these avenues and do the job on our own, because of time constraints.

this is the situation we may most often find ourselves in and we now address the question - how can we succeed best. is there a prescription to success, the right attitude, the right mix of self effort and selective guidance. can this picture be examined as though, from the outside.

everything considered, ofcourse our choice would be to succeed on our own, and it is not for the recognition from others but from ourselves, of the innate power within us. this sense of satisfaction is of utmost importance, to see our own evolving capability, our inner growth.

therefore to begin with we will address the problem by ourself, and in that approach lies largely the outcome. if we have in some corner of our mind the possibilities of easier solutions, of seeking out assistance or passing on some of the difficult parts of the problem, its just so much less we will commit to achieving it on our own.

what we fear is to fail. the outcome of failing. why can we not spend some time considering the fallout of that. the worst of that is being pulled down in so many ways. but apart from it becoming a risk if others depend on your holding out, the pain of coming down in others eyes contributes to awakening this fear of failing. but when do we fail. you were assigned one part of the work, but the whole project collapsed, what could you achieve with your own part.

so its important to consider the scope of your effort and know that there are other parts tied to it, and their movement is going to affect yours. that's a consideration to keep in the back of your mind - but you can single out the essential component of your work, the part of the total effort which is just yours.

lets consider how it came to be yours. your manager recognized your special skill and in his judgement, the ones required for accomplishing that task. a little fairness was also involved, a correct measure of your function within the group, and importantly the opportunity to develop and grow out for you. these may have been the considerations in an assignment coming to you.

the part that meets most of your focus is the difficulty aspect where you find yourself asking, can you do it. and if you can, you will.

but, there is now an unescapable moment, an inevitable moment when you are going to look eye to eye with what you have to do, that is beyond your current experience. what has worked and what hasn't for this situation. there is definitely one moment of darkness when you don't know what is to be done. this you anticipated as the first sense of difficulty of this task.

again you may feel pulled to taking assistance or passing the job, but we've already considered those, and you have reached the core of the problem which is yours by assignment, and you feel the oppresive pull of defeat, which is just the direction you mentally follow, imagining the consequences of not accomplishing the required task. but if the time for doing isn't up, and you've just started, can there be anything else but to bring yourself and consider the actions from those already in your reportoire.

this is the moment of focus.

you've unravelled out from the task the most critical and as yet unattempted part of it and attempting to match yourself to it. you know you fall short in the first measure. there is more you do not know and less you are familiar with, and as you consider it in further detail even more complications begin to appear, and their attending risks add more to the improbability of their being overcome with whatever you have in your arsenal. something about it all is pressing you to flee.

at this time we can see its not our skills which will lead us. and this is a situation created in most general terms and will not only happen with everyone but with everybody almost everytime, and we are left considering something totally out of the specific needs of the job as being essential to accomplishing it.

so what is it, and if it isnt about any specific task in particular, it is some characteristic trait which comes into play everytime, and unconscious though we may be to it in ourself, it is responsible for our succeeding, whenever we do.

it appears as some staying power, at a level where difficulties are considered not in their specific form but become diffuse, and appear as a personal threat and try to subdue us. we have here a battle, a struggle that no one else can see. but that this does take place we may judge from the times we've found ourselves involved in some tussle, unconscious moments, mostly those between being visibly occupied with somethings.

when do we win these struggles, what is the probable outcome of these, and can we in any manner affect their outcome. we are definitely considering strengths of a personal character and asking how relevant is that in bringing about the outcome of the tasks we take up. we accept a challenge, we allow it to confront us, instead of denying it, or not processing the task at all, and accepting we are not ready for this.

EF_Team2 1 / 1703  
May 2, 2007   #2
Greetings!

You've raised some interesting philosophical issues and have a unique writing style! You don't say what class this is for; ordinarily that might not matter, but in this case the answer to that does have some bearing on my comments. If, for example, you are writing this for a philosophy class, it is probably very much on point. The same is true if it is meant to be a sort of experimental style of writing. If, however, you will be graded on the usual things such as a strong thesis, arguments which support that thesis, and a conclusion based on the evidence you've presented--and proper punctuation--you may find your instructor will not be kind in grading your work.

Unless your instructor has indicated that punctuation is not important, you should go through and make sure every sentence begins with a capital letter and ends with either a period or a question mark. Read it aloud to catch run-on sentences. Any time your thoughts come logically to a stop, there should be a period. You can use a semicolon in some places where you have a comma, but it needs to divide two independent clauses which could stand on their own as sentences.

I'm afraid I really didn't understand the "trees" analogy...

It is generally not acceptable to use contractions in formal writing, but if you do, be sure to put apostrophes in words like "isn't." If you use "its" to meant "it is" then you want one, too: "it's."

I really like the tone of your writing; it reminds me of the tranquility of a Japanese watercolor landscape. I just hope that your unique style is acceptable to your instructor!

Thanks,

Sarah, EssayForum.com
OP Rajiv 55 / 398  
May 3, 2007   #3
Dear Sarah,

Thank you very much for your time and your comments.

I apologize, I am not a student in any school. I was looking for some reader feedback and I am not sure if I may only be taking up everyone's time here.
OP Rajiv 55 / 398  
May 3, 2007   #4
to continue... where do I want to go with my writing? I honestly do not know and would love to hear your suggestions.

Thanks again. I am putting up another essay, I kind of like it here.

Rajiv
EF_Team2 1 / 1703  
May 3, 2007   #5
Greetings!

You are more than welcome here! This is a free forum for everyone and we can all learn from each other. :-)) I think any of us who has felt a serious urge to write has asked the question, "what do I want to do with my writing?" Fortunately, there are more options than ever these days. Many websites exist to assist writers with not only tips and writing advice, but the opportunity to post their work online in a portfolio. Doing internet searches with terms like "writers" or "freelance writing" will turn up a bunch. You can then visit them and get some ideas about what's available. You may want to look for magazines which buy essays from new writers (there are a few, though sometimes they pay only in copies of the magazine); you may want to look into self-publishing or print-on-demand if you are committed to the idea of seeing your work in book form; you may even want to find out how to get an agent (eventually) to see whether you can get a deal with a publishing house. By exploring these writing sites and reading articles by and for writers you can gain a wealth of information to help you answer the question, "where do I want to go with my writing?"

It's good to have you here and I look forward to reading more of your work!

Thanks,

Sarah, EssayForum.com


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