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During the years in mid-school , i joined the school`s swimming club as a way to keep myself fit and healthy. My innate swimming talent was unravel and nurtured by my coach. Since then , swimming has became something that i cant imagine living without it, it has became part of me . Soon within a few years , i climb to the top of the food chain in the swimming club , winning numerous competition and became the best swimmer in the school . At the same time , unconsciously , a sense of arrogance and conceit bulit inside me.
It was during the summer in the last year of mid-school . Decided to have a class picnic , we went to the river behind the school as our place of destination for its beauty nature scenary. The once crystal-clear river has became murky due to the downpour the day before , also the river raised and became very rapid. Somewhere during the conversation while having picnic, i started bragging about my swimming achievements and claiming that i could swim across the fearsome river with ease.
My classmate being irritated by my boasting, challenged me to swim across the river. Being challenged, my competitive nature and arrogance wouldnt allow me to back off despite knowing consciously the vicissitude of such a swim across a river in such condition. With my head blurred by conceit, i persisted on.
Just before the race, my classmate withdraw out as he was too afraid to swim. I laughed at him for being too useless as i prepare to swim regardless of the warnings given by other classmates about the perilous swim across the repid river. My egoism wouldnt allow me to admit defeat, especially infront of the public. Armed with only a pair of trousers , i dove into the river. Instantly i knew i have made a dire decision to attempt such a swim, the current of the river was way beyond my capability. In a blink of an eye, i was suck under the water by the underwater current. As my effort to reach the surface seems futile , death was inevitable.
As my vision began to become blury and white ,memories flashes in my mind , all those memories since i was young till today screen across my mind , one of the memory during my childhood surfaces vivdly. It was during 3 years old, together with my family, we went for a swim at the neighbour swimming complex. With no knowledge at all about swimming and assuming that this is just a very huge bathtube, i jumped into the swimming pool to realise this isnt a bathtube. Strungling in the water for air and close to drowning , a hand from the surface reaches down and grabbed my hand and pulled me up. Afterwards i fell unconscious.
If it wasnt for my brother again , my near death escape wouldnt be possible. This close encounter with death has thought me a very important lesson in life, i will never be arrogant againt and act irrationally.
During the years in mid-school , i joined the school`s swimming club as a way to keep myself fit and healthy. My innate swimming talent was unravel and nurtured by my coach. Since then , swimming has became something that i cant imagine living without it, it has became part of me . Soon within a few years , i climb to the top of the food chain in the swimming club , winning numerous competition and became the best swimmer in the school . At the same time , unconsciously , a sense of arrogance and conceit bulit inside me.
It was during the summer in the last year of mid-school . Decided to have a class picnic , we went to the river behind the school as our place of destination for its beauty nature scenary. The once crystal-clear river has became murky due to the downpour the day before , also the river raised and became very rapid. Somewhere during the conversation while having picnic, i started bragging about my swimming achievements and claiming that i could swim across the fearsome river with ease.
My classmate being irritated by my boasting, challenged me to swim across the river. Being challenged, my competitive nature and arrogance wouldnt allow me to back off despite knowing consciously the vicissitude of such a swim across a river in such condition. With my head blurred by conceit, i persisted on.
Just before the race, my classmate withdraw out as he was too afraid to swim. I laughed at him for being too useless as i prepare to swim regardless of the warnings given by other classmates about the perilous swim across the repid river. My egoism wouldnt allow me to admit defeat, especially infront of the public. Armed with only a pair of trousers , i dove into the river. Instantly i knew i have made a dire decision to attempt such a swim, the current of the river was way beyond my capability. In a blink of an eye, i was suck under the water by the underwater current. As my effort to reach the surface seems futile , death was inevitable.
As my vision began to become blury and white ,memories flashes in my mind , all those memories since i was young till today screen across my mind , one of the memory during my childhood surfaces vivdly. It was during 3 years old, together with my family, we went for a swim at the neighbour swimming complex. With no knowledge at all about swimming and assuming that this is just a very huge bathtube, i jumped into the swimming pool to realise this isnt a bathtube. Strungling in the water for air and close to drowning , a hand from the surface reaches down and grabbed my hand and pulled me up. Afterwards i fell unconscious.
If it wasnt for my brother again , my near death escape wouldnt be possible. This close encounter with death has thought me a very important lesson in life, i will never be arrogant againt and act irrationally.
