standardized English examinations
In the recent years,the number of school students decide on joining standardized English examinations like TOEFL, IELTS or TOEIC is on the increase.From my point of view,there are several reasons for this trend.
First and foremost,beyond the shadow of the doubt,taking standardized English examinations may evaluate accurately your English proficiency.By virtue of comprising qualified and adequate tests of essential skills of learning English,students may find it easy to check their English proficiency in order to set their goal to improve the score.Besides,standardized English examinations like TOEFL, IELTS or TOEIC are objective and have a certain reliability.Therefore,there is no need to worry about the unfairness and cheating
Another cause for this trend is that it is an important and necessary step in the process of applying for your study abroad.Nowadays,most of the universities all over the world require a certificate to verify students' English level.Consequently,having successfully taken standardized English examinations,students are able to apply to study in many international schools such as: Harvard,Oxford or Stanford.
Last but not least,it will be an advantage when students apply for a job.It receives worldwide acclaim that English is one of the most popular language;therefore,It is indubitable that being able to speak English is clue to career success and considered to be a valuable asset to any job;which means that you are required to take standardized English examination.
In conclusion,there is a variety of causes explained for the tendency of taking standardized English examination.It is important for students to take part in those English examination so as to achieve their goals in their life.
I think your last idea should be clarified more, taking a standardized test do not help you in your career but it is having a high score in those tests that does help you.
Besides, in my opinion, some parts of your essay are wordy as if you wanted to showcase your vocab so you added as many fancy words and phrases as possible.
There are some grammatical mistakes in your essay:
- school students who decide
- such as Harvard, Oxford and Stanford.
- those English examinations
Holt Educational Consultant - / 15461 Your essay is good but relies heavily on word fillers such as:
- First and foremost,beyond the shadow of the doubt
- Last but not least
- In conclusion
Avoid the use of word fillers. Although it shows that you know how to use certain English phrases, word fillers are often the cause of phrase usage errors among ESL students. An ENL speaker does not rely on word fillers for their written or spoken English. Speak direct to the point. Utilize the use of topic sentences rather than word fillers to start your paragraph. That way the reader immediately gets an idea of what the discussion in that paragraph will be about.
You are also relying too much on the use of commas in the presentation of your ideas. Ideas are better presented using a mix of punctuation marks. The most commonly used is the period or the full stop. That indicates a complete thought process in a sentence. Avoid using 2 ideas in one sentence. That creates a run-on presentation. You may use an Oxford comma only to list connected words in a list such as ; Harvard,Oxford, or Stanford.
While it is nice to see that you have an "advanced" English vocabulary of sorts, the use of these archaic words make the essay sound unnatural. You should practice using everyday English words, phrases, and other colloquialisms. This will show a more practical side to the way you use the English language. You will also score better in the international English tests when you show this natural ability to write in English.
You have good reasoning in this essay. The grammar may not be perfect but you still managed to explain yourself in an understandable manner. You should brush up on your sentence exercises to learn more about how to naturally format an English sentence.
As mentioned previously, i appreciate the idea that you want to show your vocabulary, i believe having a more clear and simple sentence will impress the markers more.
First and foremost > Firstly
beyond the shadow of the doubt > without doubt
Besides, just for your reference, you may also say these exams can assess people's level of proficiency in English, while achieving execllent scores can offer candidates more options for international exchange or further their career path.
Good luck :)
Thanks you guys for evaluating my essays.
By the way,@Holt can you share some tips how to write an essay naturally.I really need your comments so please feel free to do this.
Thanks for all
