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Every year some languages die out; language as the most important achievment



fatihy007 3 / 7  
Dec 9, 2013   #1
Every year several languages die out. Some people think this is not important because life will be easier if there are a fewer languages in the world.

To what extend do you agree with this opinion?

From the entire fields of the human endeavor, we can consider the language as the most important achievement we made. However, as many places the human race has occupied and lived in all around the globe, as many languages have been developed .each language has its society and culture flavor. Some people want to take those flavors out and replace them by a mono flavor .although, they argue that the communication between people shall be easier, I shall disagree with that opinion and I prefer to keep our earth as spicy as it is.

Firstly, the most influenced area with language is art .The presence of many languages gives art a lot of diversity. In other words and for example, poets shall describe nature, moon, rivers and even women in different ways, because each language has its unique style .this Variety shall rich our life instead of the mono language which may colored our life into a single boring mono color.

Furthermore, our presence on earth is depending on our understanding and analyzing to the ancient civilizations especially how they accommodated themselves with earth. Generation after generation, language played an essential rule in transferring the human knowledge and sciences to the next era .thereby any language die out we lose a part of this accumulative experiences . For example the ancient Egyptians have developed a tremendous number of sciences. But nowadays, and as their language has died out, most of their science are mysteries for us.

In conclusion, many language presence is serving a useful purpose .As it help us to keep knowledge continues improvement .also it contribute on art diversity which riches our life and breaks our routine.

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dumi 1 / 6793  
Dec 9, 2013   #2
From the entire fields of the human endeavor, we can consider the language as the most important achievement we made

This is not a strong hook. A hook sentence should hook the reader into reading more. It should be interesting, meaningful and relevant to your topic too. Let's take the first section of this;

From theentire fields of the human endeavor

.... this sounds a bit awkward.

From the entire fields of the human endeavor, we can consider the language as the most important achievement we made. However, as many places the human race has occupied and lived in all around the globe, as many languages have been developed .each language has its society and culture flavor. Some people want to take those flavors out and replace them by a mono flavor .although, they argue that the communication between people shall be easier, I shall disagree with that opinion and I prefer to keep our earth as spicy as it is.

Through out your introduction, I find you attempting try things in a more novel manner, but they haven't come through nicely. For example;

each language has its society and culture flavor

... how can a language has a society? what you should have said is that;
Each language represents its society and culture.
I strongly advise you not to experiment with phrases or words if you are not sure... They would interpret a total different meaning and spoil your essay.
niesaysi 16 / 281  
Dec 24, 2013   #3
..as the most important achievement we have made...
..as many languages have been developed , each language has its society...
mono flavor .Although, they argue that the...
In other words andFor example,
its unique style .This Vvariety shall richenrich
instead of the mono- language which may colored our life into a single boring mono color.turn our life colorlessly.
played an essential rulerole in transferring...
continues improvement .Also it contributes on art diversity..


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