Zaria Forman has dedicated herself to preserve indefensible places which are may soon extinct

Drawings that show the beauty and fragility of earth

Zaria Forman has dedicated herself to preserve indefensible places which are projected will be extinct by climate change. It cannot be a dispute that there has been a proliferation of global warming over the last decades, therefore, she wants to witness changes in those sites until the time goes on. Her hope is to inform people to slow climate change. In addition, she has a tendency to persuade people to do so through art, it is because she believes that this easily touch people's feeling.

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Okay, your essay delivers the goals that Zaria Forman wishes to convey through her drawings. Your essay is direct to the point and really covers the most important and most obvious aspects of the talk that she gave. The summary works in terms of delivering the quickest and most obvious information from the video. It seems to me though that the summary could have been better presented if you had presented the information she shared regarding her more personal reasons for wishing to present the beauty of the earth this way. Such as the influence of her mother, the time she spent with the Inuit tribes, and other aspects which could have been summarized into the essay as the direct influences in her life that led her to portray her drawings in this realistic and beautiful manner. Make sure that you always listen to the video straight through so that you don't miss out on the other important but late introduced information within the talks given. You can do that. There will never be a video 20 minutes long for your review for the test.

Hi Zaria, below are my thoughts on your summary essay;

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- It cannot be a disputed that there has been
- she wants to witness this changes
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There you have it Zaria, I believe this is the first time that I'm reviewing your essay and I hope it helped your revision, I would also like to take this opportunity to WELCOME you here on Essay Forum, with utmost enthusiasm, we are thrilled to welcome yet another member of this growing family. Here on EF, we strive to provide you with the most comprehensive feedback and the most accurate review in order to strengthen your essay and develop your skills in writing.Keep writing!

..... will be extinct / TO EXTINCT by climate change.
It cannot be a dispute / CANNOT BE DISPUTED that there ............

....., it is because she believes that this CAN easily touch people's feeling.

overall, it is clear that you have a good control in grammar and has attempted to write varied complex structure. Thus, it will not help to enhance your skill if you only summary a short and easy article or delivering a very short summary. you need to try to read more complicated article then summarize it well. Look the one which will give you many new and less common vocabulary.

try to look for article in historytoday for example, or just simply look for longer one and article of the subject that you are not familiar with. with this way, you can broaden your horizon, give you many ideas to be developed in both speaking and writing session

Hi, below are my several advice for you. perhaps useful.
1.It cannot be adisputed
2.,(you should put dot, not comma) therefore, she wants to (...) until the time goes on. Her hope is to ...
3.will to be extinct by climate change
4.Her hope is to inform people to slow climate change.(how?) ---> you should put a supporting sentence to explain more about the idea.