Essay prompt //
Compare and contrast how heroes are portrayed in The Odyssey and in "The Wizard of Oz". Please focus your analysis on Odysseus and Dorothy, who can be considered a "great hero" in his or her way. Explore how both Homer and Director Victor Fleming (based on L. Frank Baum's novel) express their views of what defines a great hero.
What I need criticism on -
Hi, I need help with the introduction of this essay, once I get this thoroughly looked at, I believe the rest will be fine and dandy (:P). Below is the introduction...
Introduction -
In most fiction books and movies, finding heroes is as simple as adding two and two together. A hero is someone who is admired for great or brave acts or fine qualities. In both, The Odyssey and "The Wizard of Oz", there is a commonality among all heroes. The book and the movie had multiple heroes within them, however, Odysseus and Dorothy both stood out in their own special way. Odysseus and Dorothy share the same amount of pureness, pureness of an adventures mindset, however, there is a lot more behind their inner character. Besides the fun, they are both clumsy and attentive to their surroundings at the same time; as time progresses throughout the book and the musical, both Odysseus and Dorothy become more like heroes as they increase in bravery and heartfulness.
Thanks in advance!
hai nishi
I have some suggestions for you
In the most fiction (...) finding heroes isare as simple as ...
A hero is someone who is admired forsince great or brave ...
... multiple heroes within them, however,but Odysseus and Dorothy ...
... the same amount of pureness, pureness ofsuch an adventures mindset, however, there is a lot of more behind ...
Besides the fun, they are both of clumsy and attentive ...
thanks
Hi Nishant,
You do your best on doing this writing, other than that, several suggestions are available for you.
In the most of fiction books and movies,....
... who is admired for its great or brave acts or fine qualities.
The book and the movie had multiple heroes within them ,...
Odysseus and Dorothy share the same amount of pureness, pureness of an adventures mindset,...
Over all, you may avoid the redundancy as it will make your writing flow become destructive. In addition, in case of writing an essay you must prepare to organize your ideas due to the cohesion and coherence issue.
Good luck
