should we care about celebrities? (introduction)...

should we care about celebrities?
is my introduction clear??
thx for help..[

People have their own lives, and they could do anything they want, unless it is against the law; therefore, the celebrities have the right to do whatever they want under the umbrella of law. On the other hand; celebrities should pay some more attention to the society and the culture around them because many of them consider as a role-model for the new generation. So it is not acceptable for the most famous swimmer (Michael Phelps) to smoke marijuana because there are many young looking up to him.

Begin with your first sentence introducing the title and then write lines about the debate.

According to the law, celebrities have the same rights as citizens of the state. However, law and reality are two separate domains and in the real world the question of celebrity privacy is a complicated one. Some people feel that celebrities have the same rights to a private life as non-celebrities. Other people feel that they don't have the same rights because they are role-models and should act accordingly. This paper will take a in depth view of both sides.

---i dont know... perhaps something like what i've written? i dont know how you would incorporate phelps into the introduction. perhaps save it for the body of the paper. i think you had all the information needed for the introduction, it just lacked organization.

good luck.