Finalizing explanation of low GPA in additional mini essay

reasons of low GPA scores

Dear Friends,

University requests mini essay if You would like to clarify low scores. I had low GPA in BS degree and I try to explain my low gpa.

I would like to finalize it with below paragraph, is it proper?
Thank You all

Finally, I am hoping to statement of purpose is decent in the presence of admission committee. I look forward to being able to have the opportunity to admitted MBA program and improve leadership and management skills through variety of courses in University of XXX

That statement does not make any sense at all. You are supposed to be discussing your low GPA in the letter, yet you mention a statement of purpose, which is a totally different essay from a GPA explanation letter. I think you are confused about the information that you should be sharing with the admissions committee. It would have been better if you had posted the complete letter in this thread instead of just the end part. I truly feel that you need to have your whole letter reviewed in order to ensure that you have written the correct letter in relation to the purpose that it is intended for. If you have the opportunity, please post that letter in a new thread here. You already made a mistake with your confusing closing statement. That is what makes me worry about the overall content of the letter that you wrote. It would be in your best interest to have us review your letter here either in the urgent thread or within our offered services.

I agree with Holt. There are numerous syntactical and grammatical errors and this probably means that your letter itself may contain many errors. If you post the letter, we can help with making the changes needed.