GENTRY MEVZ: How can I make this part of my Screen play clearer?

"Our vision is blurred as we feel the luminous moment pass buy like a dream. We look down at the sidewalk's freckling of blackened gum. At the brown, beige, and fibrous debris of the storm. Two conversely statured shadows walkbeside one another. We look up at the taller stature, a man in his thirties. His tanned skin silhouetted by the autumn sun. He is GENTRY MEVZ, Martin's father."

I'm not sure the first sentence is clear enough. how can i make it more visual?

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incomplete sentence here: At the brown, beige, and fibrous debris of the storm.

We look down at the sidewalk's freckling of blackened gum -- at the brown, beige, and fibrous debris of the storm.

this sentence needs a verb:
His tanned skin is silhouetted by the autumn sun.

More visual? It already is filled with imagery. You write really well. I think you can make it more visual, though, by adding one sentence BEFORE the first sentence of this, a short sentence that includes something about the setting, so that when the luminous moment is passing by in the second sentence the reader knows what is going on.

This is good stuff!