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The question of whether hard work is the only factor that contributes to a success rather than luck


mabu9669 4 / 9  
Jun 6, 2010   #1
When the people succeed, it is because their hard work, luck is doing nothing.

An idea for the topic about being successful



This is my topic in IELTS class, I try my best to write this essay. Please help me to correct it or some idea to make it better.

The question of whether hard work is the only factor contributes to succeed rather than luck is indispensable is a very controversial issue and ...

reeseinskool 2 / 2  
Jun 6, 2010   #2
People in a favour of materialism often argue that the greatest achievements, hard work is the crucial key opening the door to success. (that's a comma splice).

Unless ancient Chinese mixed together charcoal, sulfur, and saltpeter all items commonly found in kitchens in those days, modern people would not have seen any firework.

it's good in the end but you need to try to make your introduction better there's alot of mistakes.

I hope this helps! :-)
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,335 129  
Jun 7, 2010   #3
Hi Mabu9669, I think I remember Mabu as the name of a "horse riding" stance in kung fu class. Is that where your username comes from??

The question of whether hard work or luck is the important factor that contributes to success is a very controversial issue, and it is now a matter of considerable public concern. No, it's not a matter of cnsiderable concern, just an interesting philosophical question. Do this:

The question of whether hard work or luck is the important factor that contributes to success is important for students, because they need to know with certainty what will happen if they work hard. From my point of view, luck is the final piece to make your hard work come to success.

Having said that, however, it should also be mentioned that som e people oppose the former arguments; they claim that luck may reverse their life spectacularly. ---good sentence!! Ha ha I like it...

Another good sentence:
In conclusion, while I agree that success can be impossible without hard work, I do not believe it is the only factor guarantee success.

The successful people appreciate luck:
Luck is worthy to of a great deal of appreciation from the public concern. successful people of the world.

:-)
Charz 3 / 33  
Jun 7, 2010   #4
I admire Einstein and I liked that quote of his.Mind writing it again?? (Just teasing)

.. it also need to be taken into consideration that hard-workers can real express their abilities...

Would you want to add this quote somewhere especialy in the concluding part; '' Success in life is like riding a biclycle,in order not to falli, you need to pederise more and more.So keep on pederising it might be your lucky not to fall '' pederising being like working hard..

Great,you add onto my knowledge book.
OP mabu9669 4 / 9  
Jun 11, 2010   #5
@Charz: pederising being like working hard => I cant find this word in dictionary (Oxford 8) :(
@ Kelvin: mabu is a character in Japanese Manga :)
@ reeseinskool: I'll try :)

Thanks all for your help :D
Charz 3 / 33  
Jun 12, 2010   #6
Real?? Whats the term for cycling a bicycle? :).Because,thats what I mean..! My vocabularly is poor! Sorry..
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,335 129  
Jun 12, 2010   #7
Whats the term for cycling a bicycle?

Pedaling.

The things your feet rest on are called pedals, so English has a verb for it: "to pedal"

Kevin was resting his feet on the pedals, and he was pedaling very slowly because it is hard to pedal a bike while reading a book.

:-)
Charz 3 / 33  
Jun 12, 2010   #8
Yeah..! I meant pedaling :) how can I forget that ofcourse B-).Thanks Kev.


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