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How to start an essay about a trip to remote island and bring 3 emergency instrument?



sasan_hozhabri 1 / 5  
Nov 12, 2010   #1
hello
my teacher ask me to write an essay about a trip to remote island that there is no man on it and we are alone on it

furthermore he want me to bring 3 emergency instrument that i know it is importand and finally explain that why i bring them
i hope u get my mean
can any one help me please ?
i am a new member
im waiting for your answers

melkorthefoul 13 / 31  
Nov 12, 2010   #2
Well, just think about it. If you were stuck on a desert island, what would you take in order to survive?

Personally, I would take a satellite phone, a solar-powered appliance charger and a water purifier... I think the explanations are obvious, no?
OP sasan_hozhabri 1 / 5  
Nov 13, 2010   #3
thank you very much
can you write an essay aboat it yourself ?
this is my first essay and i dont know how to start and how finish it
i don know how manage the introduction,body and conclusion and topic sentence
im beginner
please help me !
EF_Kevin 8 / 13053  
Nov 20, 2010   #4
Hello Sassan.

I'll give you some "sentence starters" to help you start:

1.) If I am alone on an Island, I will_________________

2.) I will survive if _______________________

3.) The first item I bring is __________

4.) This is important because ________________

5.) The second item I bring _____________

6.) This is important ___________

7.) The third item I _____________

8.) This is _________________

Make an essay!! You can do it! Even if it is terrible, that is okay. :-)
OP sasan_hozhabri 1 / 5  
Nov 21, 2010   #5
thank u very much
i write an essay and send it for you
love
OP sasan_hozhabri 1 / 5  
Nov 26, 2010   #6
here is my terrible essay !!!

if i am alone on a remote island i will survive if i bring these three emergency instrument:
satellite phone,solar battery charger and water purifier.

i think these instruments can save me on such an island.

in this essay,i would like to analyse that why these instrument are important to bring with myself.

the first item i bring is satellite phone.

this is important because its coverage may include the entire earth because it can connect to orbiting satellite and provide similiar function as mobile phones such as sending text message and connecting to internet browsers.we can use it in critical situation.

the second item i bring is solar battery charger.

this is important because when rechargeable batteries of satphones has no power we can use it.

rechargeable batteries of satphones don't need to be connected to wires and only need a solar battery charger.

solar battery charger is not one of glamorous gadgets but it is a necessity device for electric devices like mobile phones.

the third item i bring is water purifier.

this is important because pure water is important for our body to prevent us from disease.

with water purifier we can purify the salty water of the sea and enjoy from drinking tasty water.

is this essay need extra explain ? please guide me !!!
can i have a conclusion for this ?
is my opening sentence good ?
if the pragraphs need extra explain please help me !!!
i'm not a native student.
thank u very much
KathyLala 20 / 114  
Dec 1, 2010   #7
Basic grammar: You should capital all letter at the begining of a sentence and capital after a period, and capital letter I, yourself=>"If I am alone on a remote island I would survive if I bring satellite phone,solar battery charger and water purifier because these instruments can save me..."(finish introduction)

=>"in this essay,i would like to analyse that why these instrument are important to bring with myself.
the first item i bring is satellite phone." Omit this one, don't say "in this essay", readers know this is your essay. Since you already say you will bring satellite phone in the intro, do not repeat it again. Now follow Kevin outline

2)I will survive if I bring the satellite phone because....
Moreover, my suggestion is you need to read or search a little bit of "how to write 5 paragrahps essay! Maybe it would help before you start to write your own. It took me a few years to learn how to write a simple essay too, and I still have been learning! GOOD LUCK
OP sasan_hozhabri 1 / 5  
Dec 2, 2010   #8
Tnx a lot kathy for helping me
Is my text good or I should develop it ?
Thanks again
OP sasan_hozhabri 1 / 5  
Dec 3, 2010   #9
can my pragraph and my reasons convince the reader that these instruments save me ?
is my essay grammatically correct ?
please answer my questions
thanks a lot


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