I have to do an essay regarding the American Dream of equal opportunity.
Myth or reality.
Why does the rich get richer and the poorer.
why is there such a huge gap between the rich and the poor?
Does everyone have equal opportunity whether black or white, male or female, to
succeed in America?
Does hard work and individual merit ensure success in our society.
or is individuals judged on what we are instead of our individual achievements?
does being black put someone at a disadvantage to succeed?
does growing up in a low-class hood a good enough excuse to not be able to succeed
in our country?
if a child grows up with foreign parents who can't speak english, what are his chances of success in America?
Basically I need to come up with an argument/thesis about equal opportunity and success, if it's a myth, if it's not....if each of us have equal chances of succeeding
What are your thoughts/opinions on this subject?
I hope this wasn't too much.
any thoughts would be appreciated!!
THANK YOU
Trying to think up a thesis, this is what I have for now:
While other countries are fighting for opportunities, Americans need to do more to also fight and strive for what is rightfully theirs; with hard work and determination, anyone in America is given a chance to succeed as long as they believe in themselves.
I don't think it's a strong enough thesis because I need information to support it and I wanted to talk about education, benefits, hard work and efforts/motivation as my supporting paragraphs.
I NEED HELP!! :(
Stories I'm quoting from:
The Lesson - Toni Cade Bambara
The Black Avenger - Ken Hamblin
and maybe the Achievement of Desire - Richard Rodriguez
You're working backwards. You are trying to come up with a thesis, then trying to think of information you can use to support it. Start by taking plenty of notes on the topic you are researching, then craft a thesis that seems reasonable based on your notes. In other words, figure out what the information will support, and make that your thesis, instead of trying to cram the information into support of random thesis.
This debate usually comes down to whether or not you think people are generally equal in their abilities, attitudes, and values. If you do, then social inequality must be the result of an unfair social system. People like Barrack Obama, who are black and come from lower class backgrounds and still succeed (and I don't know of any position that would be considered more of a pinnacle of success than POTUS) are outliers and exceptions.
If, on the other hand, you believe people are not equal in their natural abilities, their personal disposition, or in the choice of their values, then you will see people such as Obama as proof that the system works, that people with the right abilities, attitude, and values can succeed no matter where they start from.
Like most long standing debates, the truth probably lies somewhere in the middle. Clearly, it is possible for people in America to rise to the top even when social conditions are against them, if they are intelligent and hard working. At the same time, it is clearly easier for some to succeed than others. The white son of a wealthy businessman will, all other things being equal, do much better than the black daughter of a prostitute. In other words, it is possible to believe both that America allows a high degree of social mobility and still recognize that opportunities in America are unequal. The two aren't mutually exclusive. It depends on the breadth and depth of the inequality (If the vast majority of people fall into the same range, even if there are extremes populated by a very few at the ends, then most people might still reasonably find the playing field level in most cases), the avenues in place to combat inequality (scholarships, for instance, might allow hard-working, intelligent students from lower-class backgrounds to attend college when the tuition would normally be out of reach), and a host of other factors.
there is one dream that everyone strives for; the American Dream.
The American Dream can mean many things to different people. For some it can mean success or freedom, for others, it can mean having lots of money and luxurious things.
These two statements are contradictory. If the American Dream means so many different things, then you cannot say it is *one* dream every American strives for. I do like your attempt to define the American Dream, though. You just need to come up with some unifying principles that underlie the various versions of it you mention.
With hard work, determination, and a good education, anyone can succeed with the right attitude
I can see this leading to an overly simplistic discussion of the issue. What about someone who is born with an IQ of 50. How will such a person get an education? How will he succeed, even with hard work and determination? What about someone from a poor family whose mother comes down with cancer? How does someone having to shoulder those sorts of medical costs manage to succeed at doing anything but barely paying the bills (if they're lucky)? Bear in mind, I tend to agree with the general thrust of your essay so far. Many people won't, however. If even someone inclined to agree with you finds your approach too shallow, then you can imagine how negatively those who strongly disagree with you will react.
"Individual Opportunity: Myth or Reality"- please proofread my essay for English
Individual Opportunity: Myth or Reality
Many people have dreams whether it is to buy their dream car, dream house, or go on their dream vacation. Here in the land of freedom and opportunities, there is one dream that everyone strives for; the American Dream. The American Dream can mean different things to many people. For some it can mean success or freedom, for others, it can mean having lots of money and luxurious things. In today's society, almost every person hopes for this dream. But is it possible for each and every person to achieve this dream? Some people go to school, get a well-paying job, and are able to make it to the top while the fortunate ones get there on pure luck. Then there are others who have difficulties climbing the economic ladder and remain at the bottom discovering this dream is nothing more than a myth with endless trials and disappointments. While some are struggling to survive in this world today, Americans should appreciate what they have and realize the benefits this country has to offer them; that with hard work, determination, and a good education, anyone can succeed with the right attitude.
So what is the American Dream? Essentially it is the idea that anyone can succeed through thrift and hard work, and be potentially happy living successful lives. People were always taught that if they were honest and worked hard enough, they were able to obtain their dreams. However, the American Dream seems to be more difficult to reach nowadays because not everyone is content with what they have. Society is caught up by the media and everything around them and are brainwashed to believe that the American Dream includes big mansions, luxury cars, and expensive possessions. The definition of success has also been changing over the decades and is causing people to desire things that they never would have before. As some would define success by getting married and having a family, others would define it by making a six-figure salary and wearing designer clothes and accessories. With today's generation, it is never enough and people tend to want more and more which raises the standards of success for some people causing many to lose hope in their dreams. When people are not satisfied or happy with what they have now, it leads to unhappiness and desiring more means having to make more money. In Toni Cade Bambara's "The Lesson" Sugar quotes, "Well we got four dollars anyways, we could go to Hascombs and get half a chocolate layer and then go to the Sunset and still have plenty money for potato chips and ice cream sodas." Instead of struggling to pay off credit cards used to pay for unnecessary material things, people should learn to be content and happy with what they currently have and perhaps they would be able achieve success.
Success in America is not guaranteed, however, neither is it a guaranteed doom of failure. America is known for its diversity of cultures filled with many difference colors and backgrounds. Every individual is given the opportunity to succeed regardless of what they are or where they came from. Although, it is true that a white child raised in an upper-class neighborhood will have greater chances of success then an African-American or Hispanic child who was raised in a poor community, it does not mean that success cannot be obtained. In Ken Hamblin's "The Black Avenger" he states, "I have never believed - because I was never told - that because of the color of my skin I could never get the fullest measure of opportunity in America." Chances for success in America are definitely possible if a person is determined enough and put the extra effort in to it. To say that because of one's gender, race, color, religion, sexual orientation or background, success is unattainable, is just another excuse to give up. It might take more work and motivation to climb to the top, but if everyone knew the benefits and resources available to them, they would realize that success is very possible.
Education is certainly not necessary for someone to become successful. Look at Bill Gates, Thomas Edison, and Steven Spielberg. However, not everyone has the same intelligence and skills of these men. Many people require a good education background. It has been traditionally said that a good education leads to success. It is a fact that a person who graduated with a college degree has greater chances of finding a well-paying job than those who do not. The government offers assistance to those interested in a higher education. Government grants, financial aid, and scholarships are just to name a few. Many people are not even aware of the benefits available to them because they are not informed about it or they might not have the tools to research about it. Some may not even feel they are good enough or smart enough to even try. Despite a person's race or background, no one should feel that just because they are born in poverty or grew up in a lower class neighborhood, they have to stay that way or live that way. Bambara states, "Where we are is who we are. But it don't necessarily have to be that way...poor people have to wake up and demand their share of the pie" (p. 276). People need to start believing in themselves and know that the sky is the limit. If everyone would take advantage of all the free money that is available to them, they could reach their goals and see that anything is possible.
For many generations, people sought out for their American dream and believed it was attainable. However, lately it has become a myth to some and many are losing hope for the future. It does not have to be this way though. Many immigrants fled to America. The fortunate ones arrived on a plane, while the not so fortunate ones arrived on a boat. Despite the financial hardships and language barriers, they still managed to save money, open up their own business, and do what they came here to do; achieve their American Dreams. If these people can do it, anyone can do it. People have to wake up and realize the good things this country has to offer and learn that this world is not perfect. Everyone has to work hard for success, but for success to happen, one must seek the opportunity and take advantage of it. No one said that life would be easy. Society needs to also understand the true meaning to success and what it means to them. Moreover, they need to realize that with the right attitude, determination, and motivation, it is possible for any individual, regardless of color or where they came from, to rise above the rest.
Does my essay make sense? Does it transition well? Does my conclusion end well?
Get rid of your first paragraph and start here:
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The American Dream is the idea that anyone can succeed through thrift and hard work, and be potentially happy living successful lives."
Education is certainly not necessary for someone to become successful. Look at Bill Gates, Thomas Edison, and Steven Spielberg.
Both Bill Gates and Steven Spielberg were born to relatively wealthy parents who enrolled them in good high schools, from which they graduated. They both did well enough to get into college, and spent at least some time studying there.
You still seem to oversimplify the issue somewhat, and to deal with it only shallowly. Try revising the essay to dig deeper into your subject matter.