Audit and Finance LETTER FOR MASTER ADMISSION - the university offers the best opportunities for me

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international audit, economics and finance

I am writing this motivation letter to express my interest in applying for Master's degree in international audit, economics and finance at the XXX university. With my Strong academic performance, passion and hard work, I strongly believe that it will enable me to make an excellent contribution and lasting good impression at the University.

I graduated from University of XXX with a bachelor's degree in Mathematics and Statistics, and was awarded the Vice Chancellor Best Graduating Mathematics and Statistics Student, 2010. After graduating, I took all required papers and training required for Chartered accountant certification in order to become a chartered accountant in Ghana, making me a member with good standing of the Institute of Chartered Accountants, Ghana.

The relevance of the Masters program to my future career/educational plans is that, it will prepare me sufficiently to mentor other individuals who could not get the opportunity to study in France to acquire the same skills. Also I believe, a successful completion of the Master in International Audit, Economics and Finance at University of XXX will provide me with a deep understanding of the world of finance, economics and international Auditing, and give me the ability to apply this concepts and international standards since this course combines theory with hands-on practical skills via an internship. By so doing, I will be able to train and equip others together with young colleagues in my area of interest to add to the human capital needs which are desperately lacking in Ghana and within the sub regions. In addition, my employment background as a finance officer and financial Reporting analyst for multinational firms, Airtel Ghana limited and Vodafone Ghana Limited respectively has exposed me more to the role of Finance and Auditing, basically in the world of Digital Finance (Mobile Financial Services).

I would like to learn more about International Audit and Finance and after looking at the curricula, I believe that the university offers the best opportunities for me to educate myself further in the field.

I believe that my educational background and career experience offer a solid foundation. However, through the University master's program, I hope to develop and learn more critical skills and knowledge, which will help me contribute my quota to the economic growth and development of Ghana, which is promoting digital finance as part of financial inclusion for the citizens and the world at large.

Attached to this letter are all documents required for my admission. Thank you very much for the consideration.

Dear Ernest,

I am not going to delve deep into particular details from your writing. Instead, I am going to offer a couple of pointers that will help you craft a better essay.

1. Do not state the obvious. Speaking highly of a university's potential, research opportunities and generally prestige is something that will only take up space with no added value. The admission office knows how great their institution is, hence there is no need to emphasize it any more. Instead make your letter more personal, which brings me to my second point.

2. Make your essay personal. What I read in your essay are information that are not unique to you and, therefore, do not help you stand out in a group. If anything, certain cliches can even harm your chances for admission. So, what I would advise you to do is to use a large portion of your essay to speak of a personal story that no one else can relate to but you; a story that actually touches the admission officer and makes them feel genuine interest in pursuing studies at their institution.

I hope this helped! Good Luck!