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I believe that curiosity has been the cornerstone of man's evolution. I have this curiosity and thirst for knowledge in me. My interested in machines has been right from my childhood. I liked tinkering with objects and always enjoyed analyzing and understanding the working of machines, starting from experimenting on my toys to fixing my bike. I found 'Mechanical Engineering' as the best way to quench my thirst for knowledge and contribute to it in a positive and constructive manner.
I had always desired to be a part of renowned Indian Institute of Technology (IIT) and IIT-JEE where best minds of India study Technology and Research after competing at one of the world's toughest entrance exam. I was proud to be amongst top 1% with an all India rank of 2970. IIT-JEE success paved the way for my formal technical education by providing me the opportunity to join the prestigious Institute of Technology- Banaras Hindu University. Four years of rigorous training in Mechanical Engineering from this college where the acceptance ratio is 1.61 has fortified my analytical and reasoning skills and introduced me to a multitude of topics ranging from the very basics of Basic thermodynamics and Kinematics to more advanced courses such as Manufacturing Process, Automotive Engineering etc.
Right from the inception, I had a predilection for the practical aspects of the curriculum. I thoroughly enjoyed studying Automobile Engineering, CAD and Operations Research. My choice of pursuing Automotive Engineering has not been an inadvertent one. It started in my sophomore year when I undertook a project that required design and fabrication of a Radio controlled IC Engine Buggy car. Our objective was to design the steering mechanism and chassis and use servo motors to steer and provide throttle to the car. This model was then used to compete in an Asia level Technical festival organized at IIT-Bombay. We ranked among the top 4 teams. Furthermore, my industrial training stint at Maruti Udyog Ltd gave me an insight on manufacturing and assembly of passenger cars. At MUL, I was assigned a project Multi level production system to make the Assembly line of Weld-shop more flexible. I analyzed and optimized the production line of Weld-Shop for White bodies of ALTO and WAGON-R. My recommendations helped them to reduce lead time for production by 6 sec, which in turn had increased their output by 19%. I opted for Automobile Engineering in my 7th Semester to build a solid foundation for my future studies.
My curiosity in Computer Aided Design motivated me to approach Dr. Sandeep Kumar (Prof. Mechanical Department) who taught me CAD and FEM. As a part of my final year project under his guidance, I studied the fatigue behavior of impulse turbine (Pelton wheel turbine) blades. Our objective was to determine the fatigue life of Pelton Wheel turbine blades as the cyclical load leads to their Low Cycle Fatigue (LCF) failure. The failure results in unplanned shutdown of the plant which results in loss of effort and money. In this work, AutoCAD was used for generating the solid model and for procuring geometrical data. The model was exported to ANSYS WORKBENCH where subsequent Stress, Deformation and Fatigue analysis was performed. This project has given me a great exposure in the field of design and most importantly the method of interpreting the results in to drawings of the parts of the turbine.
I took my Mechanical Engineering career to next level as I joined Tata Motors Ltd. (India), a fortune 500 company which is also a forerunner in Commercial Vehicle Manufacturing. I have been working in Service department where my main responsibilities are troubleshooting of technical in the field, monitoring and mentoring of workshops. During my tenure at Tata Motors Ltd, I was assigned a project to reduce the brake effort in heavy trucks wherein I successfully integrated the mechanism of Clutch booster with Dual Brake Valve and achieved a reduction of 40%. I have handled complex cases of vehicle failure in the fields ranging from the simpler issues like HEOC to the serious ones which I investigated jointly with the Research and Quality teams. The most challenging task during my tenure was to troubleshoot the problem of low mileage in LCV trucks/buses. My recommendation to change the overflow valve installed on the FIP and to increase the diameter of Return line helped in increasing the mileage by 20%. These experiences have honed and enhanced my skills in the failure investigation of vehicles.
My intentions and ideas keep evolving everyday and right now I stand at dreaming ten years beyond where I see myself working on my own innovative project. I would want to start the realization of this dream by gaining deeper knowledge into my field of interest: 'Automotive Engineering'. I strongly believe in constantly evolving nature of technology and would like to be a part of the evolution. I think research is one best way we can constantly better our lives. After learning about the research at your University, I am even more eager to join your pioneering team and consider myself a suitable applicant for such research, given my analytical background, ardent interest in the subject and brimming motivation. I have realized that the existing graduate program perfectly suits my requirements and the ongoing research program is in perfect accordance with my needs.
I strongly feel that the guidance of the capable, research-oriented faculty of your department will make my graduate study at your university a fruitful endeavor. The fact that University of ****** stands unique with its infrastructure, faculty and resources, motivates me to be a part of it and I believe that the above qualifications make me an excellent prospect for graduate study. I sincerely hope that you would share my confidence by accepting me into your esteemed institution.
Thank you for giving me the opportunity to express myself.
I have this curiosity and thirst for knowledge in me. Find a synonym for curiosity- you don't want to repeat the same word twice so closely together.
MyI have been interested in machines has been right fromsince my childhood.
Four years of rigorous training in Mechanical Engineering from this college where the acceptance ratio is 1.61 has fortified my analytical and reasoning skills and introduced me to a multitude of topics ranging from the very basics of Basic thermodynamics and Kinematics to more advanced courses such as Manufacturing Process, Automotive Engineering etc.
This sentence is way to long. Try to write these things in shorter, simpler sentences.
Right from the inception, I had a predilection for the practical aspects of the curriculum. You are using some big words here that are uncommon, simplify to make this easier to read.
This project has given me a great exposure in the field of design and most importantly the method of interpreting the results in to drawings of the parts of the turbine.
This sentence is a bit long and wordy.
Keep editing a little more, your paper is well-done. You have a lot to say and a very interesting story. Good luck in school!
