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One of the main reasons that brought me to apply to BU was perhaps the rich cultural diverse atmosphere it provides, being located in the heart of one of the most cosmopolitan cities in the world. The exposure to the many nationalities and religions in Massachusetts will enhance my cultural awareness and allow me to teach and be taught many attributes that could only be learnt with experience and from different people with an amazing blend of personalities. Furthermore, the premedical opportunities offered in BU; especially the clinical experiences and volunteer activities will help re-affirm my passionate and burning desire to pursue my dream in the health professions and to assist those in need. My trip to the refugee camp in Syria opened my eyes as to the extent that medical support is required in the world. I aspire to volunteer actively in the community service programs offered in BU not only to help me acquire characteristics needed in the health professions but help me explore my interests and prepare me to achieve in a complex, ever-changing world. I hope to fulfill my aspirations in a high quality and nurturing university in the midst of a dynamic environment to the best of my abilities.
One of the main reasons that brought me to apply to BU was perhaps the rich cultural diverse atmosphere it provides, being located in the heart of one of the most cosmopolitan cities in the world. The exposure to the many nationalities and religions in Massachusetts will enhance my cultural awareness and allow me to teach and be taught many attributes that could only be learnt with experience and from different people with an amazing blend of personalities. Furthermore, the premedical opportunities offered in BU; especially the clinical experiences and volunteer activities will help re-affirm my passionate and burning desire to pursue my dream in the health professions and to assist those in need. My trip to the refugee camp in Syria opened my eyes as to the extent that medical support is required in the world. I aspire to volunteer actively in the community service programs offered in BU not only to help me acquire characteristics needed in the health professions but help me explore my interests and prepare me to achieve in a complex, ever-changing world. I hope to fulfill my aspirations in a high quality and nurturing university in the midst of a dynamic environment to the best of my abilities.
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