"Taiwanese brands do not know how to make use of its resources in online marketing and collaboration with other companies. " I think you shouldn't generalize and make an statement like that or they might get the idea that you haven't done enough research. Maybe I would mention it in a different way...let's say how in your opinion online marketing for taiwanese brands would increase if the right usage of resources was implemented " (of course written in a better way i'm just trying to give you the idea)
This is a very helpful comment and hope you pay attention to this.
This was triggered by a trip to the United States done in 2011. I discovered that many major brands have a very strong brand image and that this image is presented across actual and online retailing.This was triggered by my trip he USA in 2011 where I found how aggressively the major brands make use of e-commerce tools to build their brand image and how successful they have been with capturing customer loyalty by doing so.
I observed that Target has distinguished itself from other discount storeswith its exclusive deals with various name brands and designers and increased the foot traffic of its stores (both actual and online).
.... I wish if you rephrased this line a bit - the part I highlighted does not convey your idea properly.
That means it is perfect for a person like me who is interested in Marketing but have no related
With my experience in setting up an online store and the professors' many years of experience, I would be placed in the best position to learn.
... again, this is not very clear.... better re-phrase!