MPH admissions essay; any topic related to why you want to enter the program 1 page long

any topic related to why you want to enter the program 1 page long

My future career goal is to create one stop programs that assists individuals with hearing loss and diseases of the brain. That is why I desire a Masters degree in Public Health(MPH) from Des Moines University online.

The MPH degree would educate me in the Field of Public Health. The education I desire to learn through the online MPH program at Des Moines University will assist me in gaining the valuable knowledge necessary to achieve my goal.

The above programs I desire to design are both for disabilities that I have. I would like to create the one stop programs. To assist and not hinder persons seeking information about these disabilities. The one stop programs would be for the disabled, their families and employers. A place for the disabled to learn about their disabilities, and teach families and employers how to understand these disabilities the limitations and strengths.

My vision is to have the programs run by the disabled for the disabled. I think the disabled assisting families, the disabled and employers of others with the same disabilities would best serve individuals seeking to receive information and improve the quality of life for those such as themselves living with these disabilities, you can not see.

People that need to use the services will be getting the information from persons that realize the strengths and goals of those living with the same disabilities. Because they have personal experiences with the same disabilities themselves. There experience with the disabilities could give information not asked for or possibly assist clients in exploring other options, that could be helpful. Locating and giving hidden information could better assist and not hinder clients who seek to be better informed. Finding information on both of these disabilities should be a one stop process.

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Congratulations on the choice to apply to college! Here are my thoughts:

"assists" should be "assist."

"Field of Public Health" is not a proper noun and thus shouldn't be capitalized.

I suggest linking the two first sentences of your last paragraph with a comma instead of making them two separate sentences; this will help with the natural flow of the piece.

In regards to your content, I think you've done a fine job. Your piece is very well organized, stays to the topic, has nicely structured paragraphs, and flows well overall. Your introduction is both concise and appropriate, and your closing wraps up the whole piece very nicely. Great work!

Best of luck!

Regards,
Gloria
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Thank you Gloria your input is just what the doctor ordered

enjoy the holidays

you didn't mention anything about the program?