My decision to take up Instrumentation Engineering was a logical culmination to my fascination for Electrical and Electronics which started as mere curiosity but soon developed into an obsession.
I realize your intention is to use "culmination" to describe many parts coming together into an end result or whole, but you went off on a tangent before explaining the parts...and I am still confused about the whole.
"My fascination for electronics and all things electrical culminated in my decision to study Instrumentation Engineering." See? The end result of your fascination was to study IE. I still think the thought needs more expression and detail, though. It is just too puny to stand in your thesis. That doesn't mean you can't use it elsewhere by the way.
This spurred me towards a good performance at the Higher Secondary Certificate Exams on the basis of which I gained admission to the prestigious Bachelor's Technology program in <college name>.
This is yawn-provoking. How about leaving this entire second paragraph out for now and working on the thesis.
which coupled with my intrigue.
< did they have fun?
I am sorry for being snarky, Harkiart, but the first 2/3 of the paper is spent telling what you have done when the whole point of a SOP is to state your purpose in applying to the graduate program at a particular school. This opens up a plethora of opportunity to make grammatical errors for no real good reason, you see? Only in the short ending do you really begin to state your reasons for wanting to attend this program. >>
[quote=harkirat777]I believe that the broad overview gained during undergraduate studies can be consummated only by the in-depth study that a Graduate degree will entail. My field of interest being highly application <this is awkward..."Because [field of interest] is highly application and user-oriented, it offers tremendous potential for development."
and user oriented offers tremendous scope for development.
give me front-line exposure to the technological advances (that will be)
made in this field and allow me to contribute to its
I am aware universities in the
UK offer great scope<what do you mean by "scope?"
and encouragement for intellectual & academic development and the qualifications from UK have been recognized and respected throughout the world.
OK, don't go overboard with the praise, however deserving, of "UK schools." Focus on one school's contributions to your chosen field of study lest you sound like you are just desperately wanting to go to England for generic reasons. There is competition among individual schools in the UK just like everywhere else, I suspect, so make your essay more about why you want to study at a particular school and what your purpose of studying there will be.
Your qualifications are numerous and praiseworthy, but you should save it for a CV and make it more concise for this application.
Good luck! I look forward to reading the revision!