"a successful business background" -SOP for Masters in Management programme

Please help me in reviewing my SOP for Masters in Manangement program.It would be really great if its taken as urgent request as I have to apply in day or two.

STATEMENT OF PURPOSE

Coming from a successful business background allowed me to have my first rendezvous with the art of management. My involvement in the household business chores, during early teenage years inculcated an aptitude and appetite for acquiring knowledge in this field. I thoroughly enjoyed spending my leisure hours in helping my Uncles with handling accounts, planning ways to enhance business , designing promotional campaigns and the like, but little did I know at that point that one day I would decide to take it up as my future career. The decision to choose management as a vocation has come after a yearlong deliberation and contemplation. In the following, I have made an attempt to enunciate the various events which helped me in zero in on your course.

...spending my leisure hours in helping my uncles with handling accounts, planning ways to enhance business, designing promotional campaigns and the like, but little did I know at that point that one day I would decide to take it up as my future career. ---- whatt is "it"? I am confused. You should name the kind fo business you are talking about. Name it in that first paragraph.

In the following paragraphs, I have made an attempt to enunciate expound the various events which helped me in zero in on your course.

for the all around development of an individual.

I have always had a firm belief that social welfare and betterment of _________ should be the core motives of any venture.

...your esteemed institute is an extremely well thought-out decision on my part.

Very impressive!!!!!!!