(surface production facilities) my SOP for master degree in petroleum engineering

here is my sop, Please review. I would appreciate your comments and suggestions. i hope to get fast replies as the dead line is 11 march

Statement of purpose
I was born and I grew up in Saudi Arabia the largest oil producing country in the world where oil industry is the backbone of its national economy, this was the main reason that gave me a strong passion for studying and then working in oil industry.

I studied petroleum engineering in Suez Canal university-faculty of petroleum and mining engineering for five years. In those five years I studied many petroleum courses including drilling, production, reservoirs, geology & exploration, during my study I was assigned to make a plenty of researches and presentations, I was interested in making researches in new technologies used in the oil & gas industry. I was obsessed with every new tech and how to develop new techniques improving the industry in every field.

After graduation I worked in El-Wastani petroleum company as a gas processing engineer although I was more interested in drilling but I have benefited greatly from this work and added me a lot of technical expertise in the field of surface production facilities. It also added a lot to my soft and interpersonal skills.

After a successful undergraduate education and a working experience in the Oil and Gas industry, I would like to take my achievements to the next level. I thought carefully of my career options and realized that during these challenging periods of unrelenting research worldwide for extraction technologies to bring out the maximum remaining petroleum, this would be the perfect time to contribute. For that I need a unique advantage which I believe would be truly delivered by your esteemed university.

I am looking for pursuing a master's degree in petroleum engineering focusing on drilling and new technologies in it, my research will concern about drilling deviated, horizontal and multilateral horizontal wells and how to drill through HPHT formations and how to save time and money through this operation. I am also concern about offshore drilling and improving the techniques of drilling in deep water areas. After completing my Master's degree I intend to enter the work field to increase my working experience and improve my career, i will also start to pursue a PhD degree.

I believe that x university is the perfect place for me as it is reputed for its specialty in Petroleum Engineering and it has a very strong faculty and advanced research facilities that can help me to achieve my goal

I am confident that I have the preparations and potential to prove I will be an asset to your graduate program as a graduate student and as a research assistant. Thank you for your consideration; I look forward to an intellectually inspiring and fruitful association with your university

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Hope this would help you. GOOD LUCK & BEST WISHES!!

Although your statement of purpose is decent, I suspect it would be much stronger if you included more details about the research you did in college. For example, instead of saying "I was assigned to make plenty of researches and presentations," you could say something like, "I conducted research and made presentations on several new technologies, including novel drilling fluids that greatly reduce friction in horizontal laterals, drill bit geometries for particularly hard formations, and logging-while-drilling instruments for high pressure/high temperature wells." This will show your knowledge of the industry's technical challenges and reinforce the idea that you're passionate about technology. If you pick the right examples, it might also show that you have a background in the areas you want to study.

When you discuss your work experience, consider pointing out some of your accomplishments. For example, did you apply emerging technologies to reduce the facilities' construction or operating costs, design a facility for unusually sour or otherwise challenging gas, or come up with ways to transport gas more efficiently? Like the details about your research, this will show your knowledge of the industry. More importantly, it will suggest that you're a go-getter, soemone that looks for ways to improve operations and puts them into practice. That will show the university you'll put your education to good use, which should make you much, much more desirable.

I hope my comments reach you in time and are clear enough to be useful. Regardless, good luck with your application.