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On the verge of rounding off what I would consider a successful undergraduate nursing education


Prinz18 3 / 10 5  
Feb 28, 2016   #1
What are your professional and educational goals as they relate to the Master's program to which you are applying?

The stage was set, the years had flown by, and I was on the verge of rounding off what I would consider a successful undergraduate nursing education. I was filled with ecstasy at the prospect of returning to my beloved country XXXX, reuniting with my family, contributing my quota as a Nurse and being there for mother during those dreaded Asthma attacks. However, few weeks before graduation, I received a call that my supportive mother had been rushed to the hospital in critical condition and pronounced dead two hours after arrival. Within that two-hour window, not a single physician was available to attend to her and as her conditioned worsened, she lost the fight. I was shattered and, as the days rolled by, more angered by the circumstances preceding her death.

However, the weeks after her demise played an enormous role in shaping my educational and professional goals, and accelerated the need to pursue my dream of becoming a Nurse Practitioner. As an undergraduate nursing student at XXXXX, I purposed to build a formidable nursing foundation and utilize the educational resources at my disposable to become an excellent care-giver and patient advocate. Also, I participated in research and leadership roles to harness my potential and fulfill my quest to obtain an overall well-rounded education. During this process, I discovered that I greatly thrive in situations that require leadership and will appreciate the enhanced nursing scope, knowledge, autonomy and independence that is afforded a nurse practitioner.

The absence of skilled professionals to intervene prior to my mother's death has served as an impetus to be the most effective nurse practitioner I can be. It has become my life's statement. This involves being present for the patient. Being present to assess, diagnose, prescribe and having the professional latitude to administer prescribed care plans with compassion and sensitivity to patient needs. It also encompasses possessing a strong skill set to remain relevant in a dynamic healthcare field. In my opinion, the concept of the "patient" is complex and entails more than a person with an illness requiring treatment. The holistic approach treats the whole person and promotes optimal lifelong health. As an aspiring Nurse Practitioner, I would utilize my platform to promote a holistic approach to healthcare that focuses on health promotion and disease prevention. It entails being abreast of the best healthcare practices and participating in research to determine the most effective ways to ensure optimal health. Coming from a third world country, I have seen firsthand the disparities in healthcare among diverse economic environments and would incorporate this holistic approach more specifically to the disadvantaged and medically under-served population.

The circumstances preceding her death included multiple visits to the hospital and returning with only a prescription of "rest". Of course, access to the best healthcare facilities would have proved pivotal in changing the narrative for my family. Or perhaps, the presence of an advanced degree nurse could have proved vital. The patient to doctor ratio in XXXX is a far cry from the needed ratio to sustain a population of over 25 million people. It is my goal to partake in the nursing revolution in my country, that would ensure an increase in more nurses taking up advanced practice roles to meet the growing demand. This is essential to expand the population of skilled advanced health workers, in XXXX and other third world countries, and I'm particularly intrigued with University of XXXX efforts in doing this. My vision for a healthier world involves healthcare takers having a true patient-centered experience that intercepts in the primary and secondary stages before a disease becomes critical. It is my hope that I would be able to contribute greatly during, and after my education at UNIVERSITY of XXXX to give other families the chance for a longer, healthier life. I owe that to my mom, my community and the world at large.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Mar 1, 2016   #2
This is a powerful essay.

However, the weeks after her....of becoming a Nurse Practitioner. This sentence is too obvious. It says something the reader has already figured out by the time they see the sentence. Can you dig deeper and be more specific?

As an undergraduate nursing student at XXXXX, I purposed to build a formidable... beautiful language here.. formidable is a good word to use for the purpose. I liked your use of 'shattered', too. Very, very good. You should be an EssayForum contributor if you have time. : )

The absence of skilled professionals to intervene prior to my mother's death has served as an impetus to be the most effective nurse practitioner I can be. --- Again here, you repeat that idea the reader has already inferred. It's an important idea, but you can be a bit mysterious and say it in a different way. Make a poignant observation, perhaps involving a relevant statistic.

It has become my life's statement.---I wish I had your writing style!

The circumstances preceding ---- This sentence begins in an abrupt way, and it seems disconnected from the rest of the essay. I think another sentence should precede this one to introduce this important last paragraph.
OP Prinz18 3 / 10 5  
Mar 6, 2016   #3
Thanks for your insightful comments. Would definitely take your suggestions into consideration and try to perfect this. You wish you had my writing style? Dude, you made my day :) !!!!


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