Hi,
i am applying for a master program in business in the UK and therefore i have to write a letter of motivation. I know it is a lot to ask and a lot of work, but i would be extremly grateful if someone could give me advice on how to improve my letter and maybe correct my mistakes.
Thanks a lot!! Michael
Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing to apply for the Master's Program in xxx.
My name is Michael Klar and I am currently studying Psychology at the University of Vienna, which I will graduate from in June 2011.
I also took my elective courses in business administration at the Vienna University of Economics and Business, which provoked my strong interest in economic issues.
There are many reasons, why I am interested in participating in the xxx program.
One of them is my aim to work in an international field related to human resources and consulting. To me this is the perfect way to combine my acquired knowledge in psychology and my strong interest in business. Therefore I am keen on gaining a deeper theoretical knowledge in management and analytical skills to evaluate business in a global context.
I am certain that the xxx program will contribute to reaching my goal
Furthermore I would highly appreciate to get in touch with people from other countries and cultures. To my mind, it is very important to experience cultural exchange in order to broaden your mind, develop your own point of view and to understand global developments.
I also think that it is crucial to understand cross-cultural management in order to work successfully in an international field. Therefore studying in an international environment is highly important to me.
During my studies I did several internships in different companies. Through this I have already gained relevant work experience in the business area and was able to acquire practical skills in a variety of business fields, for example project management and recruitment.
I also had the chance to work as an intern for the London based company xxx, where I worked well independently and showed initiative.
I am certain, that my previous academic and professional career, my strong interest and existing knowledge in economic topics, my ability to work and study in an intercultural environment and my eagerness to broaden my horizon and educate myself further make me a highly suitable candidate for the xxx program at your university.
In addition, I feel that my career in football has helped to foster these qualities over the years. Football has helped me to learn the commitment necessary for success as an individual and how to work as a team member. As a team captain I knew my teammates were relying on me to help win a game as much as I relied on them and I am therefore used to give my best effort in every situation.
With the solid foundation in academic theory on management and practical experience on management gained through the Master's Degree program in xxx at University of xxx, I am confident that I will have the skills, knowledge, and contacts that will enable me to pursue a career in an international environment.
I would like to thank you for considering my application and I look forward to your positive response
That's what we're here for!
To me, this is the perfect way to combine my acquired knowledge in psychology, and my strong interest in business.
Therefore, I am keen on gaining a deeper theoretical knowledge of management and analytical skills to evaluate business in a global context.
I am certain that the xxx program will contribute to me reaching my goal
Furthermore I would highly appreciate getting in touch with people from other countries and cultures.
Through this, I have already gained relevant work ...
I am certain---no comma here --- that my previous academic and professional career,...
... win a game as much as I relied on them, and I am therefore used to giving my best effort in every situation.
With a solid foundation in academic theory on management and ...
I would like to thank you for considering my application and I look forward to your positive response.
I wouldn't go with 'your positive response' here. It sounds a little cocky, and they might lean towards humble!
Good luck in school and have fun!
:)
