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Posts by karan11295
Joined: Nov 25, 2011
Last Post: Dec 7, 2011
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karan11295   
Nov 30, 2011
Undergraduate / I would rather risk my grade than my integrity & passion -UC Prompt [4]

Nice essay, it's good that you stood up for yourself. But what attracts you towards ice skating specifically? Why is it, and not garlic and bicycle tires, your passion? Try to say that too in your essay. But the essay is still well written. You come off as independent and strong willed in it which is a good thing. Best of luck
karan11295   
Nov 30, 2011
Undergraduate / "I've been sober for 20 years." someone who impacted my life [2]

First of all, it must have been hard to save your friends from drug and alcohol addiction. You managed to do it, so hat's off to you. The content of this essay is amazing. But there are a number of minor grammatical errors. I am not that good at grammar so I won't be able to correct you. Take it to your English teacher. If you can't, ask some mod here to do it. They all are very good with grammar.

You tell your story well and you are a good person. Hope you get in and be a great psychologist. Good luck.
karan11295   
Nov 30, 2011
Undergraduate / 'a very talkative and friendly person' - Dear Future Roommate [4]

I would love to have you as a roommate, you seem great.
'constantly stacks of books near my bed' sounds awkward. Rephrase it if you can.
Overall it's very well written so I can't suggest anything else. Good luck
karan11295   
Dec 5, 2011
Undergraduate / "Who am I?" - Common App Essay [28]

The first time I have ever seen someone make a good Fountainhead reference. The book was awesome and you managed to convey its awesomeness and your awesomeness really well. Awesome essay man.
karan11295   
Dec 7, 2011
Undergraduate / 'Intellectual Engagement is a beast' - Bowdoin [3]

Bowdoin students and alumni often cite world-class faculty and opportunities for intellectual engagement, the College's commitment to the Common Good, and the special quality of life on the coast of Maine as important aspects of the Bowdoin experience. Reflecting on your own interests and experiences, please comment on one of the following:

1. Intellectual engagement
2. The Common Good
3. Connection to place

Word Limit-250 words

Intellectual engagement is like a beast with a frenzied passion and a loping stride. He's fast and elusive, and I have been chasing him ever since I was old enough to use a screwdriver. When other children played with action figures, I pried motors out of toy cars; when they rolled Monopoly dice, I made little battery powered boats. Seeking something that challenges my mind has led me to perform magic and study advanced physics. Thus Bowdoin, which seems like the beast's watering hole, holds sway in my heart and my mind. The physics nut inside me would love to hear Dr Dale Syphers' ideas on application of physics to everyday life, especially his work on car accidents. I am also fascinated by the 3+2 engineering program that Bowdoin offers, which would provide me the opportunity to both 'think' and 'do'. I plan to wrestle and grapple with the beast for the next four years at Bowdoin.

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