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Name: Dany Prima Putra
Joined: Dec 7, 2016
Last Post: Dec 19, 2018
Threads: 12
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From: Indonesia
School: EF English First

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d2ny   
Feb 22, 2017
Scholarship / "Where there is will, there is a way" - my motto. Self introduction for KGSP [15]

Hi @azaa1428
Be careful with your grammar and collocation. As I read through your essay, I find a lot of inappropriate expressions which could be written better.

. . . my grandmother established today's me (can you find a better phrase?) . . .
. . . For example, I entered joined ballroom . . .
. . . which is was held in the 4th year . . .
. . . prepared well and I dropped out. to "drop out" means to leave the school before you finish it.
. . . my opinion disappointment try is better than . . .

and there are more. Please re-read again after you revise your essay. Hope this helps.
d2ny   
Feb 16, 2017
Scholarship / The things that I consider before choosing the university of my future study. Australia Scholarship [7]

How did you choose your proposed course and institution*? - Essay for Australia Awards Scholarship

My road to TESOL



I am planning on taking a master degree in TESOL (Teaching English to Speakers of Other Languages). It is suitable perfectly with my background which is English language teaching and English literature. There are some things that I did to find out the details of universities that I am going to choose. I collected the information about the universities mainly from visiting their website on the Internet and other websites such as scholarship and alumni blogs. Furthermore, I visited an education fair near my hometown to gain more information related to my study. I also gathered useful input from my friends and lecturers who are currently pursuing their study in Australia.

Here are the things that I consider before choosing the university of my future study. First, the duration should be at least one and a half years since I want to deepen my knowledge about the field that I am learning, and longer study period will help me sharpen my English. Second, the institution should provide the courses that I am willing to learn which are more practical rather than research based since that is not my specialty about English teaching practices. More specifically, I am looking for the courses such as second language acquisition, language curriculum design, teaching methodologies, grammar, writing and pronunciation teaching, technology in English learning and psycholinguistics. In addition, if the program provides courses related to psychology, teaching English for students who have special needs or autistic children and teaching internship will be a greater benefit.

After I listed the universities that participate in Australia Award Scholarship which provide TESOL program, I screened them with the criteria that I previously set. In the end, I found two most universities which are the closest to the criteria; Queensland University of Technology and Flinders University.

To @holt
My comment "I believe I didn't write that, are you sure you are referring the right thing?" on my last thread was actually addressed to someone else, not you, but it seemed that you didn't read the tag that I used. Don't misunderstand me, you've been a great help since I joined EF.
d2ny   
Feb 13, 2017
Scholarship / What are your plans when you finish your studies - essay for Master Degree in TESOL [10]

How about this one?

Applying for a lecturer position in English teaching in universities in Kediri has been my dream to disseminate my knowledge and experience to the students and lecturers. Many choose Kediri as their destination to study English teaching and it is my chance to help them sharpen their techniques with the skills that I will have gained upon my completion of the program. I am planning to bridge collaborations between the university and Australian institutions for training and research purpose.
d2ny   
Feb 12, 2017
Scholarship / What are your plans when you finish your studies - essay for Master Degree in TESOL [10]

First Essay for AAS (Australia Award Scholarship) Master Degree in TESOL

Kediri - lecturer position in english



Hi, is this good enough to answer the questions? Thanks before.

1. What are your plans when you finish your studies*? (500 characters)
After I return from my study, I am going to apply for a lecturer position in English teaching in universities in Kediri. Kediri is a developing city which has some potentials in it. The quality of English taught in university there is not as good as the other bigger cities such as Malang or Surabaya. I am eager to become part of the people who devotedly spend their energy and time in increasing the quality of English teaching and help the students to become great teachers.
d2ny   
Feb 12, 2017
Scholarship / I'm really expecting a lot from studying in Korea. SOP for applying to a scholarship (KGSP) [23]

I believe you should type "English" instead of "english"
Also, use the capital "i" to refer to yourself. I agree with the previous feedbacks; you need to elaborate more as well as improve your grammar and spelling, not to mention that as far as I'm concerned, Korean's universities are not listed as number one in the world. Try to search for the university rank websites.
d2ny   
Feb 11, 2017
Scholarship / Current duties and responsibilities / human resource development - Australian Award Scholarship [4]

Hi @Rumiela, your essays need grammar checks.

... designing and data analysis which means I have ...
In the optimization stage, my main tasks are to supervise ...
... as an admin of Aircom enterprise server, I performed perform several tasks ...

As for the second essay, I small tips from me, I believe putting because after a full stop doesn't sound good. Instead, you can combine the two sentences together without it.

... the methods and advanced skills because I believe that ...
d2ny   
Jan 19, 2017
Scholarship / Essay for AAS (Australia Award Scholarship) Master Degree in TESOL [3]

Hi @Holt, thank you for the feedback.
I apologize since this is my first time using this website so I didn't know the policy.

I remember I followed the requirement of the limit of the characters, 2500 per essay if I'm not mistaken, so that is why it looks short per essay. It was my first time applying for AAS but not my first time applying for scholarship, but I have to admit I had never consulted to a forum like this before that's why I felt confused what to include in my essays.

By the way, I will include your suggestions and will post to this forum again. Thank you for the inputs.
d2ny   
Jan 18, 2017
Scholarship / Essay for AAS (Australia Award Scholarship) Master Degree in TESOL [3]

Hi, can anyone help revise my essays? This is from last year's entry (unsuccessful) and I am planning to apply again this year. A thousand thank.

Australia Award Scholarship application



First choice: The University of Queensland
Second choice: The University of New South Wales
Program: TESOL


What are your plans when you finish your studies*?
I am eager to aim a higher position in an Education field so that I can influence many people to spread the English teaching principals that I will have learned from the study. In order to do that, I will apply a position of a lecturer in a university in Kediri to teach in English Language Teaching or Teacher Training program, and/or build my own English school in Kampung Inggris (English Village) Pare, Kediri.

How did you choose your proposed course and institution*?
I choose Teaching English to Speakers of Other Languages (TESOL) in The University of Queensland which is aligned with my educational background that is English Education. I am interested in deepening my knowledge about second language acquisition and its contribution to English teaching. I am also eager to learn more about culture and curriculum and how to implement a good curriculum in a school.

My undergraduate education provided me plenty of knowledge and practice in English teaching. The subjects such as TEFL, second language acquistion, material development, phonology and psycholinguistics have broadened my mind to understand English teaching in a different perspective and they help me to implement them in my work. During my teaching experience, I have used the knowledge to plan and teach English in a way that the students find it easy to understand and I also have applied the linguistics aspects of English teaching and it results great. That helps me also to communicate with my students' parents and guide them to understand their child's behaviour and English development.

From my research about the universities that offer TESOL in Australia, I found that as I need to master language curriculum planning and practical skills in teaching, The University of Queensland offers what I need. It provides a wide range of courses such as TESOL curriculum, Language Testing and Assessment, Language and Technology and Teaching Languages in a Global Context that will support my skills development as an English educator.

How will the proposed study contribute to your career*?
With the knowledge and experience that I obtain from the future study, I will have the opportunity to gain more skills that I need to become a great and inspiring teacher. My future goal is to become an English educator for all ages with up-to-date knowledge and practical skills in English teaching issue. My bachelor degrees and working experience have provided me a strong foundation for both; this master program will provide me the skills in second language reading and writing, theory, research and practice in classroom second language acquisition and language in education planning principals in order to polish what I have got so far so that I can make a significant difference in English teaching. Furthermore, in Indonesia, students often complain about how boring an English classroom is. In addition, many people still think that English is scary and difficult. I want to change that perspective by giving different approaches in teaching English. Furthermore, living abroad in an English speaking country such as Australia gives me plethora of knowledge and experience that I can share to my students.

Please:- a) give up to three practical examples of how you intend to use the knowledge, skills and connections you will gain from your scholarship. Possible tasks can be personal and/or professional; and b) list any possible constraints you think may prevent you from achieving these tasks.*:

a) 1. One possible option is applying for a position of lecturer in a university in my hometown, Kediri. It is a small city where there are big rooms to improve. With the knowledge and skills that I obtain from the scholarship, I can help to improve the quality of the students who will become English teachers in the future. From what I will have mastered I want to encourage my students to get the same or higher path like me.

2. My dream has been building an English school in Kampung Inggris, Kediri. As an English educator, I feel that I have a responsibility to share my knowledge to the community to improve the quality of the English taught there. I am willing to implement up-to-date curriculum and methodology based on applied linguistic principals. I also plan to include a tutor training program that provides English tutors/teachers theoretical and practical skills in teaching English. In that way, I can spread the language concepts in a wider scope since they will go back to their hometown or institution either to pursue higher study, work or teach.

b) 1. Since I have been working at schools, I am used to teach as a teacher with all of its methodologies and approaches. I will find being a lecturer is quite challenging to adapt at the first time. However, I believe with my adequate experience in teaching and organization, I can keep up to follow the pace of the working environment.

2. Building a school along with its facilities such as computer lab and library to support the students' English is tough and requires a great amount of resource. Therefore I am willing to learn and work hard during my study and gradually build what I have been dreaming. I am also aware that people might find it hard to change, but I am positive that through time as they see the result of my methodologies, they will realize that English is taught by using principals that they need to understand, such as second language acquistion and communicative approach.

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