Writing Feedback / Writing task 1: The percentage of 10-15 year-olds chatting online and playing games. [6]

IELTS Writing Task 1
The chart below shows the amount of time that 10 to 15-year-olds spend chatting on the Internet and playing on games consoles on an average school day in the UK.

youth staying online and playing games

The bar chart compares how much time it takes 10-15 year-olds, by gender, to chat on the Internet and play on games consoles on an average school day in the United Kingdom.

Overall slightly more boys and girls in the 10-15 age group prefer playing on games console to chatting online. It is also evident that an overwhelming majority of boys enjoy playing on game consoles, while chatting online is considerably more popular among girls than boys.

Regarding chatting on the Internet, the number of 10-15 year-old boys spending time doing this activity for less than an hour a day is the same as that of their female counterparts, accounting for nearly 30 percent, although much more girls than boys chatting for over one hour.

On the contrary, nearly a massive 90% of 10-15 year-old male students spend time playing on games console on an average school day, whereas the figure for females is just over a half. Most girls, about one third, play on games console for under 1 hour per day, while the majority of boys, roughly 45 %, enjoy doing this leisure activity for 1 to 3 hours. It is noticable that the proportion for males in the 10-15 age range playing on games console for more than 4 hours per day is roughly 10 percent, the same percentage for females talking to their friends online for the same amount of time.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing task 1 : The three companies' waste [9]

The graph below shows the amounts of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years.

the quantity of produced waste by some companies

The illustration provides information on the figure for waste in tonnes made by three companies named A,B and C from 2000 to 2015.
It is clear from the graph that company A and B produced less waste between 2000 and 2015, whereas the amount of waste produced by company C grew gradually throughout the years.

In the first year 2000, the quantity of waste that company A made began at precisely 12 tonnes, the highest level compared to company B and C, with the figure for waste being a bit lower than 9 tonnes and slightly over 3 tonnes respectively. This amount of company A declined gradually over 15 years, reaching about 11 tonnes in 2010 and slightly under 9 tonnes in the last year 2015. With the same downward trend, Company B's amount of waste dove over 15 years and reached exactly 3 tonnes in 2015 apart from a brief rise of nearly 2 tonnes from 2000 to 2005.

In sharp contrast with the other two companies, the quantity of the produced waste from company C saw an upward trend throughout 15 years. There was a slow rise in this figure of 3 tonnes in 2005 and approximately 2 tonnes in 2010, until it reached a peak of 10 tonnes in 2015.

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  The graph