Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 1 : BAR CHART ABOUT VEHICLE HYBRID-TECH SALES IN JAPAN, US, AND OTHER COUNTRIES [3]

The bar chart below gives information on the global sale of hybrid vehicles between 2006 and 2009.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

ESSAY:
The bar graph elucidates the rate of worldwide commerce of hybrid transports during a 3-year period, from 2006 to 2009, in Japan, US, and other countries.

It is noticeable that all hybrid transport sales over the period increased through distinctive patterns among the considered countries. In other words, more customers bought those hybrid technology in the end of the period.

To begin, Japanese buyers inclined sharply from only more than 50,000 in 2006 to above 325,000 in 2009. Similar to this figure, other regions which were also taken into account experienced an upward trend though the increasing number of markets was not as dramatic as a rise in Japan.

On the other hand, the quantity of consumers in United States, who were engaged on purchasing types of transport that are capable to work technologically in hybrid, fluctuated along in the chart's period. The trend began at 250,000 in 2006 and then reached 275,000 in 2009.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 1 : World Population Projection and Population of Distinctive Areas, Urban and Rural [3]

IELTS WRITING TASK 1
The first chart illustrates the projection of global citizen development from 1800 to 2100, a 2-century period. Meanwhile, the second chart elucidates the changes of predicted number of people in two distinctive areas, namely urban and rural, over a 25-year period started from 2015 to 2040. Both figures are measured in millions of people.

The most important part to note from the first graph is that a fluctuation is foreseen to happen among human population in the world during the period of time. In addition, population of residents in urban and rural areas generally will experience significant, different changes with rural community following the pattern of worldwide growth and city citizens remaining stable.

As a starting point, by the year 1800, population number stood at 1,000 million people. In 1920, this number increased slowly to nearly twice of 1800's quantity. Continuously, the trend inclined in a considerable way by 4,000 million in 2000, and it will reach a peak at 8,000 million in 2040. After that, a drop is predicted to occur and remain 6,000 million inhabitants in the last projected year, 2100.

Otherwise, the trends in different areas, which started at above 1,000 million of urban residents and over 2,000 million of rural residents, is forecast to have dissimilar pattern over the predicted period. An unchanged trend of city population growth will make it stay at over 1,000 million until 2040, whilst a progressive rise will be able to be seen on rural society bringing the number to 4,000 million.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2 : WATER SUPPLY FOR EVERYONE OR NO RESTRICTION FOR WATER USAGE? [NEW]

As water is a valuable resource, goverments all over the world should control how much water their citizens use.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

Essay :
For living, human beings and other creatures need sufficient amount of water. Because of the necessity of water, this resource is irreplaceable in life. By this case, some people realise that city councils should limit the amount of water that is used by their residents. Similar to this, I admit that a policy for limitation of water use should be made because of some reasons.

Plenty of people who support unavailability of water resource policy argue that it would be impossible for mankind to lower their needs of water. The main reason is that water deficiency can result in worse condition of human health. It is proven significantly that one person should at least drink eight glasses of mineral water every day to keep them fit and fresh. If it is not applied, a man may suffer dehydration. Moreover, water is the only supply to create a clean environment. Not only in order to keep clean body, all of inhabitants consumes water also to wash dishes, do laundry, cook meals, or even wash a vehicle. These conclude that it would be hard to reduce water use to survive in life.

Contrarily, I would agree that water consumption would be better to be managed well. It means that restrictive rules should be created with the aim of water use restraint. One of reasonable backgrounds of this action is that many areas have less amount of water resource, so spreading water flow to these regions is necessary. This severe issue can be found in isolated regions, such as separated tiny islands, where water-related technology is not developed yet. Another excuse is that weather is unpredictable in some countries this year. Climate change has changed water cycles. This, for example, can cause one state undergoing a drought for a half year. Therefore, water saving would be a wise decision to prevent this kind of unpleasant situation. As a result, wasting water for unacceptable reason should be prohibited by rulers all over the world.

In summary, it is clearly undeniable that water saving is appropriate decision for governments to ensure widespread water supply in all districts. Related to this, I hope that not only policy development is chosen, but also all councils socialise people not to waste water.

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2 : TWO DIFFERENT WAYS IN GAINING LESSONS FROM ANOTHER COUNTRY [NEW]

Some people say that you can learn more about another country by watching television programmes and films about it than by actually visitting it.
How true is this statement? Is there anything you can learn about another country by visitting it that you cannot learn by watching programmes and films about it?

ESSAY :
Today, when human can easily travel abroad, a number of people believe that watching television channels about tourism can give more lessons about other countries rather than truly taking a tour to destination countries. This essay will explain about factors supporting that notion and lessons that can be obtained by merely visitting a country.

It is clear people tend to watch television to know more about other places surrounding them. The first reason why people are keen on this is no need of travelling expenditures. For instance, an European who is curous about Chinese Great Wall decides to see a touring channel about China because he could learn its historical background without spending his money to book an aeroplane to Beijing. Furthermore, the result of trustworthy information from a tour guide in programmes is also a positive side of lessons gained by watching travelling shows in TV. As an example, TV directors would not let their journalism being full of wrong facts about a culture, so they will always use an experienced tour guide to add more information quality.

Nevertheless, some lessons could not be learnt by watching shows in TV. First, some social etiquettes of a culture in different country are only accepted in the country itself. For example, eating by sounding chews is suggested in Japan while a consumer is eating noodles to respect the chef. Another thing people can learn from abroad travellings is how to talk with foreign language in the only place where it is used. This unparalleled chance can be illustrated when a traveller goes to Saudi Arabia which allow a traveller feeling the real taste of speaking Arabic with real community.

In conclusion, it is true that people would rather gain lessons from a country via television channels for some reasons though parts of lessons can only be achieved by actually travelling to that place. Hence, no ones can judge which one is better as foreign tourisms also offer unique benefits.

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2 : Sense of community within the apartment dwellers [2]

Some people say that living in a high-rise apartment block is a lonely experience because there is no community spirit. Others say that people who live in high-rise apartments have a much better sense of community than those who live in houses.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Several people believe that dwelling inside a flat incurs loneliness due to the unavailability of community spirit, whilst others argue that living in a high-rise flat can enhance better sense of community of its residents compared to house residents. This essay will discuss both viewpoints.

In any case, dwelling in an apartment has a capability to build good relationship amongst neighbourhood for several reasons. To begin, one's apartment to others' apartment has a very close distance which allows a person to meet neighbours easily. For example, when one owner cooks a meal, she can share with people who live next to her place. Besides, high-rise flat contain a lot of households who use the same available facilities. This happens, for instance, to the use of a swimming pool, so no body will feel different with their neighbours. These can improve their feeling of similarity to others.

By contrast, I realise that the feeling of isolation could be easily experienced by those who are more engaged on living in a flat. Many disadvantages can threat a neighbourhood. Firstly, the difference of personal characteristic is potential to cause bad relationship amongst apartment owners. To illustrate, one dweller is a person who dislikes crowded. Because his place is close to others, when another person is playing a high volume music, he could immediately stop it by claiming the rights of comfort. Secondly, the building design, which keeps residents' privacy perfectly, limits a dweller to see their neighbours' doing. Thus, people are reluctant to invite neighbours due to always-closed doors.

To conclude, while some see possibilities of good neighbourhood from living in a flat, I argue that less sense of community will emerge if people reside with that way. Therefore, all residents should consider carefully about a place to live.