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Posts by Dioba
Name: Dioba Dilianto
Joined: Sep 13, 2016
Last Post: Dec 8, 2016
Threads: 68
Posts: 97  
From: Indonesia
School: Sepuluh Nopember Institute of Technology

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Dioba   
Sep 20, 2016
Writing Feedback / Unfortunately the speed in electric cars is slower than on gas-powered vehicles. [2]

Since the first launching in the early twentieth century, cars not only has change old Roman roads with longer and wider highways, but also gas station and stop-and-go traffic are become common phenomenons in our society. Because prices of oil rises and exhaust fumes causes violent life, electrical cars are becoming one of the best alternatives. Although the electrical cars give more advantages, unfortunately the speed is slower than gas-powered vehicles.That is the reason why in North America, almost cars in there is gas powered vehicles. Different from North America, electric cars are developed by some major manufacturers in Europe and Asia. Futhermore, the government of China give some incentive not only for car manufacturers, but also for buyers electrical cars. On the other hand, American manufacturers makes the electrical cars looks like motorcycle with seats two and three -wheelers.
Dioba   
Sep 20, 2016
Writing Feedback / The Effects of Technology for Working [5]

Hi pokpok16,after reading your TED summary, i have some suggestions, perhaps usefull for you.

1. to many using word "and" as the conjuction in one sentence.you can change with another conjuction word.
" it helps and gives people more freedomandalso save time and money".
"and mobile phone, and many other"

2.be carreful with punctuation.
"In this era technology so espouse to expedite our work",better if you put comma (,)
" can improve communication in instance the employees can use sundry communication tools", better if you put comma after communication.
Dioba   
Sep 14, 2016
Writing Feedback / Taklimakan Desert - dominated by sand dunes and extreme conditions and free from vegetation [2]

IELTS SUMMARY 2 :Plant Life in the Taklimakan Desert

Almost domination by sand dunes, free of vegetation and extreme conditions, makes the Taklimakan Desert become one of the most extreme desert on Earth. Only three plants can survive, there are Popullus euphratica , Tamarix ramosissima and Alhagi sparsifolia. Every resilient desert plants have strategies for survival. Populus euphratica can survive because not only control evaporation with opening and closing the stomata mechanism, but also endure high-salt concentrations with dilutes mechanism. Different from Populus euphratica, Tamarix ramosissima or commonly called tamarisk has root system can take up water in underground. Tamarisk also has unique mechanism. That is dropping salt to the soil which it produces from accumulation salt on the glands. The purpose is make the soil around of tamarisk more salty,so another plant can not live. Same as Tamarisk mechanism, Alhagi sparsifolia also has roots with developed strategies with hydraulic conductance mechanism.
Dioba   
Sep 14, 2016
Writing Feedback / Five reasons of journey to New Zealand by foreign tourists, measured in percentage [2]

Hi Rian,this is my suggestion for your essay:
1."Journey in New Zealand and is measured.." .Better if use "Journey in New Zealand which is..."
2."reason visitors come..." . better if use " The reason of visitors come..."
3. "reasons foreign tourist", we know almost that tourist is foreigner,so its useless.we can just write "tourist", this is include domestic and foreigner.
Dioba   
Sep 13, 2016
Writing Feedback / Fulfilling the requirements for raw materials needs sacrifice of the environment [2]

IELTS SUMMARY 1:Environmental Impacts of Logging

The logging industry have an important role for supplies raw materials. But, for fulfill the requirements need to sacrifice the environment or in this case leads to deforestation. Habitat loss, pollution and erosion is the myriad effect of deforestation. This is not only can feel by humans, but also plants, animals and microorganisms lost their ecosystem. For example effect of deforestation to air pollution. The function of the trees is remove pollution in the air. Because of photosyntesis process, trees can produce oxygen from carbondioxide with chemical reaction. In the other word, cutting the trees automatically will effect pollutant airborne. The others effect are damaged aquatic habitats, drought and forest fires because the subsoil cant hold water and release it into the atmosphere. However, keeping the existence fundamental resource it must consider before deforestation for better future.

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