Undergraduate / Essay on career progression/goals and how MBA would help in the long run [5]

I like the poem, too. It leads nicely into your second paragraph:
But, 6 months back (SIX MONTHS AGO,) I had two roads to choose from. One with a journey as a consultant, something I have been working for over the past seven years and the other as a social reformer, something I begun three years back. (TRY TO USE A MORE SPECIFIC WORD THAN 'something' and the verb 'have been working' if you are still doing this now.)

You repeatedly use the term (xyz YEARS or months BACK) and should simplify by recounting events in some order or chronology.

Then you can continue with your first paragraph:
After graduating from ISB, I plan to start a NGO to help underprivileged children build a sustainable living (WOULD HELP TO GET SPECIFICS OF HOW.)

This next section doesn't really fit - do you intend to demonstrate your qualifications as a consultant? (What kind of consultant?) Maybe this fits better when you talk about building your skill set by attending ISB:

Five years back, I envisioned myself as a strategic consultant in a big four (WHAT BIG FOUR??) Ever since I worked towards it by building my credibility and knowledge. I authored international papers, gained certifications and worked with one of the best consulting firms in India.

Undergraduate / Essay about my superhero in my childhood, which was my mother [13]

The second example I wrote above should have been this one:

2) She is a very strong woman who is a wonderful mother, wife and doctor at the same time.

( didn't catch that the first example was repeated...)

Undergraduate / "Small gestures in Japanese Culture" - Common app prompt [6]

The problem I have with your essay on gift giving being the most important aspect (?) or learning (?) of your month in Japan is that you don't write about any real personal interaction. I would think that unless your japanese is fluent, how did you communicate with your host family? Did you use body language? What I am getting at is that I am missing all the human interaction that takes place prior, culminating in the gift giving.

Sorry to resort to this overused cliche but you are telling and not showing. Specifically, in this sentence: I experienced the "lasting friendships" and the "warm acceptance" of my host family. (IT WOULD HELP IF YOU RECOUNT AN INCIDENT THAT MADE YOU FEEL THIS)

I found this the heart of your essay "it wasn't the value of the gift that was important but was the action of giving itself." I would have liked a better understanding of why the act of giving was important or fulfilling to you. I can't believe that your gratification comes just from grateful smiles.

"The true satisfaction in the end was receiving the grateful smiles that were on my host parents' faces on that first day." DID YOU ALREADY GIVE THEM GIFTS FROM THE FIRST DAY? The last day would be more credible (and their smiles more sincere...)

Undergraduate / Essay about my superhero in my childhood, which was my mother [13]

One comment I'm not sure you addressed (but then maybe this has been communicated to you in your language by others) is what is the best and worse trait you have "inherited" from your mother. The essay should be about YOU - and how your mother shaped you to be the unique persona you are. It isn't about how good of a mother she is.

Specifically, did she inspire you to be a leader or a doctor (you write only about her accomplishments, not their influence on you in these 2 excerpts:)

1) "She is very helpful, she is in charge of a private charity association which helps many families. It assists with habitat,education for poor children and health."

2) She is very helpful, she is in charge of a private charity association which helps many families. It assists with habitat,education for poor children and health.

3) She damages herself (DO YOU MEAN SHE WORKS TOO HARD AND THIS AFFECTS HER HEALTH? and I must admit she is very successful. IS SHE A ROLE MODEL FOR YOU?? WOULD YOU FOLLOW HER EXAMPLE AND WORK TO THE DETRIMENT OF YOUR HEALTH?

Undergraduate / An Opportunity Of A Life Time [3]

Is the essay question about an opportunity of a lifetime? Or a meaningful achievement? Instead of clamming many accomplishments from the first sentence, wouldn't it be better to leave this to the reader (maybe rephrase by "path that led to transformative growth.") LIkewise, you write: because my actions displayed dedication, commitment, and optimism. Wouldn't it to show this with specific experiences (instead of telling the reader your opinion and conclusion?)

For instance, you talk about being able to reduce the tuition fee thanks to sponsorship but miss the opportunity to impress the reader by explaining how you secured Merrill's funding.

but my limited knowledge was actually an advantage, WHY - please give examples.

The incident about the man with a taser in the bus is dramatic but tangential to demonstrate your bravery when your essay is about dedication & perseverance.

Undergraduate / "A sense of who you are" - Columbia Application Essay [5]

Wow - you commuted for 12 years to the same school? Not sure how many hours you spent at school, but let's say on average 7 hours per day, this means the commute is 22% of your school day!! Did you travel alone from Grade 1? As you grew up and became more independent, how did the commute change? Assuming your essay answers the topic prompt "the experiences which have shaped your life" I would have liked to learn more about these topics (in red) as they help me get to know you better (from your next to last sentence:)

In addition to many happy and sad memories (examples?) , they have endowed me with a great spirit of fortitude and perseverance (examples?) as I rode each day through all weathers (I THINK THIS SHOULD BE WEATHER CONDITIONS) merely because I knew I had to . (THIS LEAVES THE READER HANGING - GIVE A STRONGER REASON.) I am sure that this spirit will help me stay on track (WHAT DOES STAYING ON TRACK MEAN TO YOU? JUST PASSIVELY SITTING ON THE TRAIN AND WAITING UNTIL IT ARRIVES?) as I stop by the many stations the railroad of life (WHAT DOES STOPPING BY MANY STATIONS MEAN TO YOU?) has to offer me.

Your writing flows well and this was easy to read. Your topic has a lot of potential which can easily be further developed!!

Undergraduate / failure, extreme sport, turning point - choosing essay topic [2]

Out of your 3 choices, it's obvious to me that your best choice would be the third question as you don't have a positive response to the first 2 questions.

Based on what you wrote, you are able to answer it well: "true turning point comeS when I realize who I am, what is my mistake in the past and what I want to do in the future."

Try writing an outline of the three points i.e.
1) your realization of who you are
2) what was the mistate in the past you learnt the most from
3) what you want to do in the future

That should make a good essay.