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Posts by Hoaidepchi
Name: Huy
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Last Post: Jan 15, 2017
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Hoaidepchi   
Dec 7, 2016
Writing Feedback / Technologies such as computer benefits society [6]

Computer is one of among revolutionary inventions that changes the world. When was the first computer invented? According to science.howstuffworks," The device conceived and designed by British mathematician Charles Babbage between 1833 and 1871". And nowadays, computer becomes a means making our society better not only because of its convenient but also of its huge impact.

A computer can be a source of information and improve your communication. With the power of the internet technology, this device can give you anything you need to know by using "Google" or many searching page on the internet. This is a big advantage for people who don't have time to find the information in library or witness themselves. In the past, we used to send letters to contact people that far away but with the computer we can communicate easily by using social network or even make friend with people around the world.

There are various type of entertainment as the computer can be your best entertainment tool. Many forms of entertainment are created for computer by the high technology due to the demand of people. Home entertainment now is improved by music and video games. The device also helps develop the gaming industry with lots of tournaments by competed directly in game using computers played by team teams.

But thing has good side also has the bad one. Computer can be used to create crime. Hackers use computer illegally to get personal information or the top secret one from a company, a organization or even the government for their own good. Programed carefully, computer can automatically create virus files that harm other computers.

Computer is such a wonderful machine. I believe it will keep being developed with advance technology in the future. But for those who use computer should aware of the bad side of this device if they don't want to be a victim of computer crime.
Hoaidepchi   
Dec 14, 2016
Undergraduate / I want to pursue Mathematics. The reasons for my inclination are many more than what I can express.. [3]

@abdon786
Hi there, I think you should consider these things
-The reasons for my interest and inclination are many more than what I can express with the help of myby words.

-I had always enjoyed solving problems and thinking andas challenging every question. (I think you dont need to use past perfect tense, simple past will be okay)

-And, my preference is to always select Math first (that common is not necessary)

-Math is a reason for where I stand among my friends and society. And, now I want to make Math, the reason of my life. (what do you mean when you say "make Math")

-And, when some of my friends come and see me so that I can explain them any concepts or questions , givesgiving me pleasure

-So, this thought makes me to think and judge not only my knowledge andbut also my command at the subject.

-My real life experiences in my society also makes math a compulsion

-And, I think the reason of my faith in ....

-it be counting lie when someone asks this (some number) plus that (other number) is -then my voice is always audible to them. (i think you should find another way to rewrite this sentence)

-My pleasure and the essence of my life evokes from Math.

-So , it had always been my forever choice and will be forever in my life. (you can use "in conclusion, to sum up, ..." to replace the word "So")
Hoaidepchi   
Dec 14, 2016
Undergraduate / Computers are ever-changing. I want to develop software that can make people's life easier. [7]

I agree with @sus_007

I also have a same essay about computer. There are lots kinds of computer and Charles Babbage is just the one who show us the way to create the nowadays computer. If you don't exactly, you should bring the entire quote from website (such as Wikipedia) and remember the source of that quote too. That will help readers can understand clearly about your essay.
Hoaidepchi   
Dec 14, 2016
Writing Feedback / Causes of stress in society nowadays - working environment, financial condition and family issue. [2]

Stress - an integral part of modern life



Stress is not a new phenomenon. It was caused among our daily life activities. When stressed, there will be lots of negative emotions which may affect badly to our heath. In my opinion, there are three main factors leading to stress. They are working environment, financial condition and family issue.

In a certain age, people will have to work in order to earn their living which means they have to face a new environment in the working place. When working during long hours or having a heavy workload, you will feel stressful every time going to work. Even your leader and teammate sometime don't cooperate with you. Under that circumstance, stress comes will be a matter of time.

Each of us has different finance to worry about. Successfully settling financial problems let us stay away from pressure. However, if you fail in managing your own finance, it will lead you in a state of stress. For example, you don't have enough money to pay bills or your salary is not enough to feed your family and even an unexpected accident happens to you taking away lots of money... When those things happen, stress comes.

Finally, I want to mention about stress occur in family issue. A familiar condition leading to stress can be an argument or a conflict with your family member. After that you will have a short-term stress and this kind of stress is easily to pass. But if things become tensions such as a divorce, it will impact on all the family members and creates a long-term stress which may have a serious effect especially on children.

Stress always happens in our life. In my point of view, stress is just a challenge. Some people lets themselves under control, others try their best to get through stress in order to have a happier life. You want to be a victim under stress or you want to be a survivor, I think you already have the answer.
Hoaidepchi   
Jan 15, 2017
Grammar, Usage / 'One might wonder what...' Need correction for this essay sentence [5]

Is this Reported speech ?
I think first one should be : One might wonder: "what is this description of " ?

The second one is correct but if this is Reported Speech exercise then the tense should be in the past.
-One might wonder what wasthat description of.
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