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Name: Anastasiia
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SiiaBirill   
Feb 13, 2017
Scholarship / I was born and grown up in the northern country. 2017 Scholarship, Self-Introduction letter [11]

Good evening! I'm applying for scholarship and they required me to write Self-Introduction letter.
The requirements are:
course of life, your view of life, study background, your hopes & wishes, etc
education and work experience, etc., in relation to the KGSP program
motivations for applying for this program
reason for study in that country


English is not my native language and I hope my introduction will be readable. I hope, by your critics i will make my letter more organized and grammar correct.

inspired by Asian designers and architects



I was born and grown up in the northern country. My mother was a dentist and father working as security now. In my childhood, I was travelling with my parents not just within my country but also overseas. During that time I mat many people with different nationalities, mentalities and languages. In very little age I had an experience with disability until the moment when my family found a good specialist to help us with that problem. Therefore, since very young age I was often thinking of people who happened to be disabled and could not do simple things conveniently. This occasion guided my life in different way of thought. Due to looking for a better life and opportunists my family trays to give me everything they could. From education till life goals they guided me and supported in any decision that I made.

I attended governmental school and after several years I enrolled in the private technological college which gave me comprehensive in-depth education of art, natural sciences, computer technologies. For additional education I took partn in an Art school for 10 years. When I finished my general education in the age of 16, my desire for helping people was rising more and to give a first step to make dreams true, in the same age I entered to the university abroad in a major of interior architecture. It is my firm of believe that there is no necessity to be an a doctor to rescue people, but you just have to be a bit creative and have a desire to help. During my bachelor degree I comprehended how the design in general can affect our psychological behaviour, how it can helps people to make life easier, more safety and convenient. By studding Universal design, which means design for everyone despite of ability and age, I became fascinated. Hence, I made a decision that I want to be a bit more specific in a daily used tools as chairs, computers, telephones, cars and etc. I want to be a industral designer. Personally, I think that a proper and clever design can weighty help not just disabled people but also people in general, despite of financial or health issues.

In 2014 I attended festival, that was provided by my university, which was devoted to handicapped people, specifically children. Before, we had a seminar that thought us how to behave with this special children and later, we started to build and create tools in collaboration with them.

One year later, I joined Noyanlar Construction Group of Companies in Iskele, Cyprus as a internship on the construction site. I learned the processes of building constructions and finishing applications as for interior and exterior. In 2016 I had office practice in Uzun Construction Group of Companies, Famagusta, Cyprus. Mostly, I took part in the renovation projects. As I did my bachelor degree in Cyprus, this Island full of historical places and buildings that needs to be supported and renovated. As well as reconsiderations of old buildings, I experienced reconsederation of historical objects as old windows and doors fixtures. Later on, I was offered part-time job in relevant company.

In the regard to University activities, I was playing basketball for 2 years for representing national Russian Society Team. Moreover, my social life was not limited by that. For other personal development occupation, I was taking part in archery and horseback riding as a hobby.

Most of the time, I was inspired by Asian designers and architects. Simplicity and innovations that they combines in the work made me want to be like them and create with the same feeling of self-devoting. I chose Korea for my further education in the reason of high level and quality of practical and theoretical knowledge. Universities provides opportunity to consolidate theoretical knowledge in practice, which is especially important in the profession of design. Applying to the 2017 Korean Government Scholarship Program will weighty helps me to learn the language and to get acquainted with the culture and heritage of the country.
SiiaBirill   
Feb 17, 2017
Scholarship / I was born and grown up in the northern country. 2017 Scholarship, Self-Introduction letter [11]

I did renew the letter and here is something that i reconsidered: about disabilities. I think, that it is better to generalize that thing about myself, because If i mentioned that it means - i have it now (but i don't, and it was at far far past) , and that may be a reason of missunderstanding and they will think that i'm disabled. So therefore i decided to do not put that info.

I will be so much thankful if you will comment this attempt as will)
SiiaBirill   
Feb 18, 2017
Scholarship / I was born and grown up in the northern country. 2017 Scholarship, Self-Introduction letter [11]

Okey, i understand. It is my first time when I'm applying to grand and I don't have any writing experience in english specifically. It was hard for me to understand what do I need to write and how to organize it, it made me depressed a bit more after the critics :) But now, I understand what i need to change and remove. Thank you for critics. It was a big course of knowledge
SiiaBirill   
Mar 2, 2017
Student Talk / Hi everyone! Welcome at EssayForum thread. [414]

Hello everyone,
My name is Anastasiia and I am from Russia.
I'm here to practic and prepare for scholarships programs essay and IELT :)
Hope to get some help with grammer, structure of the text and I'm ready to assist anyone with essay or other assignments as will :)
SiiaBirill   
Mar 2, 2017
Writing Feedback / Students should take priority to living away from home than sharing place with their parents [7]

Hello, i'm here to give some assistance :)
As far as I know essay must be no more then 300. But no less 200, if i'm not mistaken) So, you need to develop your arguments more.

You should add examples for each state agree or disagre, it will support your ideas more.
Also, it is nessesary to add linking words as : There is onother side of the issue, in contrast with the idea that ,a further convincing argument, and so on...

You may find example essays in internet and see how they operate with linking word.
In you conclusion, you should again paraphrase the topic subject and tell you final opinion)

Hope, i helped you at list a bit ^_^
SiiaBirill   
Mar 2, 2017
Scholarship / Study Plan, From Interior to Industrial design [2]

Hello everyone,
this is Study Plan draft. My issue is that I am a bit confused with the subject of research. How to explain it well. I'm an Interior architecture and Industrial design is less familiar.

I'm applying via embassy toward 3 universities.
Writing is not my cup of tea, and I realy hope to get you assistance in structure, grammar and etc. )
Thank you so much for reading my essay

Goal of study & Study Plan


Goal of study, title or subject of research, and detailed study plan

I had a decision to start my Master degree in the Industrial Design due to growing interest at this major. Since, most of my bachelor degree subjects were Interior Architecture and Design, I was specified in the knowledge of generation structural, constructional and integrated building systems, also, understanding the problem of social, public spaces and many other architectural features. I worked on user and space relationships, however, I had less comprehension what is Industrial Design and what is product-user linkage. Fortunately, my experience of relative Industrial design course made me extremely inspired. Since, I am concerned about disabled people, combination of the new major subject knowledge and my background education of Interior Architecture certainly will broad my perspectives regarding user issues of disabilities.

During my educational process, I would like to explore new design methods and applications that will lead to the comprehension of human needs. Undoubtedly, technology became a main catalyst in design development. Hence, my project will be in the relation of assistance and support people of disabilities. Equally, I will be concerned about children and old age people.

Industrial design has many classifications as household appliances, robotic, computer and information technology, healthcare and so on. The advancement in technology granted us with many possibilities. One of the recent is a map application which was designed for the visually impaired, (to provide audio to the wearer), guiding them through traffic and enabling them to use public transport. This is an instance and idea, which I will be concerned in Master degree. As a designers, for first we need to define a problem and afterword, bring the possible answer to it. How to assist and guide people in problematical situations, how to bring safety, supportive and educational characteristics into the product of the design. This all will be my crucial subject into research and practice . Therefore , for further step I choose an industrial design language to support people with disabilities via technology.

I am inclined that subject above is one of the topical modern world interest. Although, people started dealing with this issue quite recently, I have hight hopes that works on this field will lead people to humanity and awareness of other's needs. Side effects of relevant study can be applied in the field of healthcare as a supportive healthcare product, safety as an indicator or detector, or in the educational process such as audio/visual interaction for disabled people.

By researching this subject, I will be honoured to study and to dedicate my knowledge, abilities toward university wich disclose knowledge of engineering, technology, and human behaviour. I strongly believe that exploring this subject in Korean universities is an a grate chance to comprehend all design and technical features.
SiiaBirill   
Mar 9, 2017
Scholarship / "Future Plan after Study" , Design product - is an assistant. [5]

Hello, this is my draft essay about "Future Plan after Study"
I tried to include everything that is relevant to career post study plan...
Since I see that essay came up very short and I feel that I certainly missed something (but cant catch what exactly), I am
asking for you assistance and guidance.
There are possible many grammar mistakes, which I also need to eliminate with your help.
Thank you.

o Future plan in Korea or another country after study in Korea

Disabled issues in design



After graduation of Master Degree in Industrial Design I intend to patent my project that devoted to people with disabilities. First of all, I want to dedicate my efforts and abilities to the Korea, as a country that granted me with all relevant knowledge and education,that assisted me to create final product. Thus, I desire to work in collaboration with local and international Korean companies such as Samsung, LG or others. By doing so, I hope not only succeed on quality of the product, but also make it reliable and affordable for all users. Moreover

After collaboration experience, I will be more capable to create own design/architectural studio back to my country. Since the situation of single senior people and disabled must be reconsidered in (name of the country), I will share earned knowledges and experience among team grope so that proved a better performance and accomplishment in relevant task. Also, I will be concerned to lead patented product into the mass.

Moreover, my plans for developing and solving "Disabled people issue" will not have just a local character but will spread far beyond my native country. By co-working with other architectural, engineer-technological and design studios and companies, I will be focused on creating convenient and friendly environment for handicapped, senior age people and children.

By experiencing all above, I want to consolidate my knowledge by doing PhD degree on corresponding subject. Subsequently, my next intent is to be an professional lecturer. I aspire to educate people about " Disabled issues in design" and give the society all knowledge that I know, so that future generation may be more aware and responsible
SiiaBirill   
Mar 9, 2017
Scholarship / "Future Plan after Study" , Design product - is an assistant. [5]

ohhh, I was so quick and sloppily with my text edition before posting here.
that is why somewhere I had such a silly mistakes :(
But now I edited it according to your critic.
I will be so grateful if you will look at my work one more time

After graduation of Master Degree in Industrial Design I intend to patent my project that has devoted to assist people with disabilities. Foremost, I will try to patent through РСТ (Patent Cooperation Treaty), that will help me reserve my right to enter over 140 countries that are members of the PCT. Consequently, I will be free to lead patented product into mass.

Primarily, I want to dedicate my efforts and abilities to Korea, as a country that granted me with all relevant knowledge and education. Therefore, I desire to work in collaboration with local and international Korean companies such as Samsung, LG or others. By doing so, I hope not only to succeed on quality of the product, but also make it reliable and affordable for all users.

With collaborative experience, I will be more capable to create my own design/architectural studio back to my country. Since the situation of single senior people and disabled must be reconsidered in (name of the country). I will share earned knowledege and experience among my team, so that prove a better performance and accomplishment in relevant tasks.

Moreover, my plans for developing and solving "Disabled people issue" will not have just a local character but will spread far beyond my native country. By co-working with other architectural, engineer-technological and design studios and companies, I will be focused on creating convenient and friendly environment for handicapped, senior age people and children.

By performing all above, I want to consolidate my knowledge by doing PhD degree on corresponding subject. Subsequently, my next intention is to be a professional lecturer. I aspire to educate people about " Disabled issues in design" and give the society all knowledge that I know, so that future generation will be more aware and responsible.
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