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Posts by Nilendra
Name: Nilendra Pathirathna
Joined: Mar 1, 2017
Last Post: Sep 5, 2017
Threads: 3
Posts: 8  
From: Sri Lanka
School: IELTS

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Nilendra   
Mar 1, 2017
Writing Feedback / Deciding which age of the life is the happiest is a controversy [5]

Cambridge book 9 test B, task 2
Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest times of most people's lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.


people in their teens are most happy



Deciding which age of the life is the happiest is a controversy in contemporary world. While many people think that teenage life is the joyful period out of all, contrarians may believe, adult life has more happiness. In regarding to the debate, pros of the teenage life outweigh the advantages of adult life as far as happiness is concerned.

Teenage life is undeniably the most entertaining part of one's life. Moreover, teenagers have very few responsibilities compared with adults. Further, teenagers most of the time get to associate with same age friends with same interests most of the time; many teenagers don't have to work since their parents fund their education and other extra activities.

Furthermore, modern day teenagers have more activities and facilities to entertain their life happily . for instance, unlike in past they can communicate with any of their friends; anytime of the day due to advancement of the technology. In addition, high school parties and sport events make the life of teenagers more colorful.

On the other hand, antagonists argue that adults can enjoy the life since they don't have any barriers: alcohol, cigarette, adult events. However, most of the events which have restricted to teenagers bring harm to mankind. To illustrate, smoking cause cancers. On top of all, the responsibilities adults have clearly reduce the happiness of adulthood.

As a result, despite the fact that being a teenager or an adult has their own merits, advantages of being teenagers are more significant than being adults. Teenage life has less responsibilities, and entertainment of the life is enormous in teenage life. Thus, teenage life is the most happiest part of life.
Nilendra   
Mar 2, 2017
Writing Feedback / This essay will discuss the main reasons for increase the crime rate [5]

Cambridge book 10, test A, task 2
In many countries, the amount of crime is increasing.
What do you think are the main causes of crime ?
How can we deal with those causes ?


main causes of the criminality rise



Criminal activities have risen all over the world in past few decades. This essay will discuss the main reasons for the former statement, and it will provide the possible solutions for those reasons.

It is undeniable that most of the criminals in contemporary world use advance technological methods to their activities. Most of the crimes occurring in the present-day related to online fraud. Moreover, these online criminals not only trying to steal the money of the people but, they are after the vital information of other people and countries. For instance; founder of the wiki-leaks website arrested due to accessing and stealing vital information of popular people, and countries, over the internet .

Furthermore, many people have died over the past few years due to gun fires. Most of the western countries, citizens can legally obtain weapons from the shops; whereas, in developing countries, gangster groups acquire these weapons illegally. Consequently, they use these weapons to kill their enemies, rather than solving problems legally or peacefully.

However, most of these crimes can be avoided if the governments make rules and regulations to punish the criminals. In addition, if governments banned the weapons for the public; it will be really beneficial for the safety of the citizens. Most of the developing countries do not have rules and regulations to act against cyber-crimes.

In conclusion, the increasing crime rate worldwide has alarmed everybody. Cyber-crimes and weak rules and regulations are the main reasons for this. However, governments can control this situation by introducing new rules and regulations.
Nilendra   
Mar 2, 2017
Writing Feedback / IELTS WRITING TASK 2: TEENAGE YEARS OR ADULT YEARS ARE MORE HAPPY ? [7]

@kalyn
i saw few spelling mistakes and grammar mistakes plus so many words 427, you need more than 250 words so if you at least stop at 300 words instead of over 400 words, you can save time and allocate that time to proof read your essay.

spelling -

weath - wealth (if you proof read your essay you would have easily corrected this)
Nilendra   
Mar 2, 2017
Writing Feedback / Ask a friend for some help regarding a part time job [5]

asking for a favor



Cambridge book 10, Test A, Task 1
You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter
1 give details of your study plans
2 explain why you want to get a part-time job
3 suggest how your friend could help you find a job

Dear Kate,

I hope you and your family are doing great. By the way, I have a good news for you; I am coming to America in next April. Because I am going to start my degree at Indiana state university.

Since my parents can only cover the tuition fee of my undergraduate course; I must find a part-time job to cover my accommodation and other living expenses. Moreover, the undergraduate course classes will be having only on weekday mornings during the first year: Hence, I can work in the afternoons, evenings, weekends.

Moreover, I would like to ask you to find a part-time job for me, once I arrive in Indiana. It will be really great if you can find me this part time work at the place you are currently working; because we can spend most of our time together. I would be much obliged if you can give me a feedback at your earliest convenience.

Regards,

Nilendra
Nilendra   
Mar 3, 2017
Writing Feedback / Ask a friend for some help regarding a part time job [5]

@Holt
thank you very much. To be honest your letter is the best i've seen. I wish i can write like that. But hopefully, I will try to grasp whatever I can from that letter. thank you again for helping me. specially writing this letter taking your own time. It means a lot to me.
Nilendra   
Sep 5, 2017
Writing Feedback / Ielts task 2: Freedom in art. I mostly agree with this idea. [4]

@tran14 your essay has few grammatical errors as you know in your IELTS essay you should add more complex and compound sentences together with simple sentences to take a high score, so, you should concentrate on that too.
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