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Nov 23, 2017
Writing Feedback / Each househole and family produces a large amount of rubbish every week [IELTS] [5]
Could you please evaluate my essay and give me some feedbacks ?
I'm highly appreciated for every single comment, thank you.
Why do you think this is happening?
What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced?
Recent surveys indicate that in almost every country nowadays each househole and family produces a large amount of rubbish every week. The majority of this waste comes from the packaging from the things we buy, such as processed food. But even if we buy fesh food without packaging, we still produce rubbish from the plastic bags used to carry shopping home.
The major trigger to why we have to use so much packaging is that we consume a greater amount on a daily basis than families did in the past.
Furthermore, needless to say that convenience is a privilege of modern life. In this regard, we buy packaging and canned food that can be transported readily between places, and stored until we need it.
However, in my perspective, it is also a result of our tendency to use something once and throw it away. Even the cheapest plastic bag requires valuable resources and energy to produce, people might not know that it is a source of pollution and difficult to dispose of as well.
To address the problem in question, as citizens, we should make a concerted effort together with the government. Children should get educated about environmental hassles, on the other hand, adults take action. By means of putting taxes on packaging and providing a wide range of recycling system, i entirely believe we can save our society.
In light of the fact, nobody wants our planet poisoned by waste. If we persist on facing it, this phenomenon will be reversed gradually.
Could you please evaluate my essay and give me some feedbacks ?
I'm highly appreciated for every single comment, thank you.
Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish.
Why do you think this is happening?
What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced?
Recent surveys indicate that in almost every country nowadays each househole and family produces a large amount of rubbish every week. The majority of this waste comes from the packaging from the things we buy, such as processed food. But even if we buy fesh food without packaging, we still produce rubbish from the plastic bags used to carry shopping home.
The major trigger to why we have to use so much packaging is that we consume a greater amount on a daily basis than families did in the past.
Furthermore, needless to say that convenience is a privilege of modern life. In this regard, we buy packaging and canned food that can be transported readily between places, and stored until we need it.
However, in my perspective, it is also a result of our tendency to use something once and throw it away. Even the cheapest plastic bag requires valuable resources and energy to produce, people might not know that it is a source of pollution and difficult to dispose of as well.
To address the problem in question, as citizens, we should make a concerted effort together with the government. Children should get educated about environmental hassles, on the other hand, adults take action. By means of putting taxes on packaging and providing a wide range of recycling system, i entirely believe we can save our society.
In light of the fact, nobody wants our planet poisoned by waste. If we persist on facing it, this phenomenon will be reversed gradually.