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Posts by Erica Tin
Name: Erica Tin
Joined: Nov 29, 2017
Last Post: Nov 30, 2017
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Erica Tin   
Nov 29, 2017
Writing Feedback / In many countries, very few young people read newspapers or follow the news on TV [6]

Question IELTS writing task 2:


In many countries, very few young people read newspapers or follow the news on TV.What do you think are the causes of this?What solutions can you suggest?

There is a little likelihood that the teenager will keen to chase the news from newspapers or TV. As the development of Internet greater than before,youngster bombard by the enormous information from different websites.The purpose of the technology is offering people tools to enhance the progression of human society. When it comes to the changing of receving news, teenagers is the group that acceptance is higher than elderly.

Although the influence of information is a crucial element to stimulate the young generation, the life style of getting news has transform into creative ways.Newspapers and TV programs are not the only resource to catch the latest news. Instead,the Internet have supersede the traditional news transportation and the improvement of the high-technology replace the old-fashion one. Indeed,the impact of technology is the main reason to eliminate the needs of newspapers and other traditional gadgets which is the important way to transmit information before the thriving of Internet.As a matter of fact, the young people diminish the purchasing rate on newspapers and turn into website reading.

By and large, young generation prefer Internet rather than old-fashion ways to accept the data. As the nature youth, they tend to utilize the new products.In order to receive latest news, they choose to the fastest way to get the knowledge they need.

Anyway,the main purpose of TV and newspapers is spreading information,there is no need to change the youngster life style on Internet.In my personal point of view, the progression of transporting news will be replaced by other innovation of tools. It is an inevitable trend in modern society, and the only solution should be under the supervision of public.However,the future of human is unpredictable,and only a few can stop the transformation of life style.
Erica Tin   
Nov 29, 2017
Undergraduate / Spending two years of my life at a hilltop in rural Maharashtra changed my outlook on life [3]

I made some change of the first paragraph and using my own words to elucidate the situation of the sentences. This is my first time to correct others article,I hope that would be helpful.

When it comes to the formal event on Kashmir Day,the trio of the girls assured that they will always by my side and supporting me in a bold attitude but lack of knowledge on the issue.However,I did not interesting on discussing the Kashmir issus that I am not enthusiastic about Kashmir conflict or other matter which did not interfere me.In fact,I had spend sixteen years living in a bubble:My home.Some of my friends who had come from different culture did not made comments on my life,so it contribute the tremendous impact of the realization of my responsibilities on society when I went to attend high school abroad.
Erica Tin   
Nov 30, 2017
Graduate / PT PROMPT: what qualities do you feel are necessary for success as a physical therapist? [4]

As the patient performed her exercises ...

->The following is my suggestion of the sentence

->The significant improvement of patient`s shoulder range of motion makes patient and I can not believe that we have achieve our goal in this moment.

->I would recommend that shrinking the sentence and making it clear to understand.
Erica Tin   
Nov 30, 2017
Writing Feedback / The information superhighway was greatly transformed the way man conducts his activities today [2]

Question:
The Internet has dramatically altered our lives over the past few decades.Although some of these changes have been negative, the overall effect of this technology has been positive. what are your opinion on this?

impact of the world wide web



There is little doubt that the Internet be invented by human needs.People have the strong desire to get information which it is very possible that can get rid of panic of unknown future or situation.The cause of Internet to sway people`s mind is often being disscussed for many years.The transformation of modern society is entirely different from the era which had difficulty to connect each other.Generally speaking, the favorable effects and unwanted solutions have been scrutinizing by many professional expertise of modern anthropology.

When it comes to the disapprove of website impact on civilization, we usually cope with the social media of celebrities.Fashion culture has been considered as the main culprit to responsible for the undesirable side effects.Famous people require commercial activities to spread their name in order to persuade ordinary men to purchase the products which involve their salary resources.The purpose of those culprits is to gain self-esteem and the obsession of luxury goods.By and large, the website is the wonderful choices for them to spread the information which lead to the unwelcome influence on public.

However,the large numbers of websites have resulted in immediate data acquiring and making decision quickly. In the past, it is hard to obtain right information instantly.The majority of those effects often bring society into an unavoidable error.For example, once the warning of earthquake could not be published on National Weather Service Website,the lost of Country is massive and worst of all,causing the threat of human life.If the website is used in proper way, it extend the benefit of Internet giving people directions on their later time.

The quality of website should be examined by their professional people who can distinguish the right or wrong.However,only a few people have the ability to execute it, especially in the democratic society which is famous for its freedom of speech.The advantage of internet is the expression of man`situation.What we know about society just a fraction of view is can be shared by website.If we communicate with advance society by website, we improve our life through learning new knowledge from them.

In conclusion, the innovation of contemporary technology converted modern surrounding.The improvement should not be put aside by overwhelming drawback of false news.Although some argue that the unavoidable jolt of comments on website, it makes a competitive society to progress faster than before.
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