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Posts by Oscar Tam
Name: Tam King Long
Joined: Feb 24, 2018
Last Post: Mar 11, 2018
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Oscar Tam   
Feb 24, 2018
Writing Feedback / The lack of discipline in universities is a serious problem today [2]

Writing topic: Discipline is an ever increasing problem in modern schools. Some people think that discipline should be the responsibility of teachers, while others think that this is the role of parents.

Discuss both sides and give your opinion.


schools discipline is non-existent



Currently, there are many news about the non-comply discipline which came from universities in Hong Kong. The discipline problems of our Hong Kong students should be seriously concerned by the Hong Kong society. However, the responsibility in terms of discipline should be focusing on the parents either their schools' teachers that also be a question.

Most simply concept to think about the problem above I would like to say that the Hong Kong students were originally as same as the white papers and easily absorbed the standard of discipline from different media. Two most related media to them were their teachers and parents when they are at their young age. The discipline can be adopted whether in their lifestyle which related to their parents or the rules of their school that related to their teachers. Most of them mentioned above should be the same level of importance. So how can we say the responsibility of discipline should be unbalance to a bias for any one side of them? It is not fair.

The role model of discipline should be cooperatively created by both parents and teachers. When their children are still young, they can teach them how to enjoy their lunch and dinner with polite manners, such as a buffet either self-service hot pot, discipline is very important to respect other customers. Even though they are waiting for the buses or minibusses, they also need to queue into a row with discipline. In the classes whatever primary school, secondary school as well as the university, they also are required to respect other classmates if those are listening to their teachers or lecturers. Shouting and eating strongly smelled foods in the classroom is a behavior with disrespectful to others. The lifestyle either the teaching class can actually change the discipline standard in minds of our students. Therefore, teachers and parents should be responsible to foster the high standard of discipline to their students and children respectively., no one should ignore it. Otherwise, the misunderstanding concept would be growth in their mind and affect their future.
Oscar Tam   
Mar 3, 2018
Writing Feedback / Topic 1: Traditional food is undergoing great changes and being replaced by new diets. [4]

I would like to provide little bit suggestion. To 2nd paragraph, the innovative style of food culture is saving all appetites and more preferable than complex traditional ones. But I suggest that you may also consider the cost of the food since it is another main reason why attracting the entrepreneur to open such type of restaurant, with catering the taste of the customers.

To the 3rd paragraph, it also can mention more about the healthy diet trending which has been held nowadays, comparing the traditional one and the imported one. Which diet can be more attractive according to the lifestyle currently. This may make the article more persuasive due to the more perspective consideration.
Oscar Tam   
Mar 3, 2018
Writing Feedback / Studying in foreign countries gradually become an upward trend - a positive one or not? [3]

I would like to suggest that the examples are not solid at all due to the cases were only surrounding your circumstance, if the examples can actually make much more consensus to the others that would lead more persuasive to your article. I recommend that you can attempt to think through the view of the employers, which student would them appreciate, aboard student either the local student. Is it based on the reputation of their school or what? Such elaboration can reflect the real case in our society, more consensus can be understood by the readers due to their experience.
Oscar Tam   
Mar 10, 2018
Writing Feedback / When people fail at schools, it doesn't mean that they miss a chance to reach success in the future [3]

Topic: Some people fail in school, but end up being successful in life. Why do you think that is the case? What is the most important thing to succeed in life?

Are Grades Important In Schools?



In our academic stage, most adults and elders told us the academic result was so important to our life, that affects which career we carry on in the future, that affects the salary scale what we have. However, when we follow the pace of our growth and enter the real society, the fact is totally different. Many questions have been asked by our young. In this essay, I would like to make some analysis to explain the reason what is going on.

First of all, academic result and achievement are just one part of the consideration for the employers. The successful staffs and workers depend on a lot of part in their workplace, such as the working attitude, communication skills, leadership, discipline and show on. The academic result probably reflects how hard work and smart the candidates are, however it can't tell what attitude and harmony they are.

Furthermore, the graduates came from their school to the workplace, most likely need to be further training and support. The employed company required to spend their time and spirit to teach them even if the 1st class honor student in the university. That's why the academic achievement would only be a portion to weigh the availability of the employees.

To discuss the things influencing success in life, many persons would define success is how rich you are and position of your career. To my concept, I would like to introduce which should be reinforced on the foundation of basic economy and money. Those can let you chase your dream life and take care your family member as well as yourself. Based on this economic foundation, is your lifestyle and career you desire? That would be another deeper question of being successful in life. If we can gain satisfactory in terms of achievement in our career, it probably would be one of the successes in our life. If we can comply what we thought and action, it may be enjoying a delicious meal with parents, shopping on the street with friends and feeling free to have some sports with brothers and sisters. Those may be another one success in our life. To be honest, it depends on how you define the successful life to generate lots of achievements and tasks in your mind that you need to step by step to complete each one.

In conclusion, people fail in school doesn't mean that they miss the chance to possess success in their life since it just becomes one part of the score to be considered by the employers. The most important thing to succeed which depends on what your goals and satisfaction in life.
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