Writing Feedback / IELTS WRITING TASK 1: sales figures - export performance between 2003 and 2008 [2]

total sales of goods to US and Europe

The bar chart illustrates Company ABC's export performance between 2003 and 2008, products were exported to North America and Europe. Units are measured in dollars in million.

Overall, yearly figures for exportation to Europe varied, whereas that to North America followed a trend of rising. Products exported to Europe were more significant than to North America in the first two years, whilst the company transported more goods to North America in the following years.

In terms of exportation to North America , the rate was the lowest in 2003 (just below 20 millions dollars). The number increased steadily to over 50 dollars in million in 2008. Each year, the value of products exported to North America increased by around 10 millions.

On the other hand, the total sales of goods to Europe throughout the period stayed above 20 millions dollars. From 2003 to 2005, the sales amount increased by slightly over 10 millions. Then, it experienced a fall to precisely 20 millions in 2008.

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Writing Feedback / WE COULD NEVER LEARN TO BE BRAVE AND PATIENT, IF THERE WERE ONLY JOY IN THE WORLD [4]

"WE COULD NEVER LEARN TO BE BRAVE AND PATIENT, IF THERE WERE ONLY JOY IN THE WORLD". HOW FAR DO YOU AGREE WITH THIS QUOTE? IN WHAT WAY IS OUR HAPPINESS LINKED TO OUR ABILITY TO OVERCOME OBSTACLES IN LIFE?

my work:

happiness versus obstacles in life

Everyone is bound to encounter ups and downs in life and life's greatest lessons are learned through hardships, and according to Helen Keller: "We could never learn to be brave and patient, if there were only joy in the world". I totally agree with this quote.

From my perspective, the quote means that only by facing challenges do we gain bravery and patience and if life is always a bowl full of cherries, we may not improve ourselves. Patience is the ability to wait or continue doing despite difficulties. Bravery is defined as being courageous behavior and is the virtue that is hard to acquire. Tackling problems requires boldness to take actions and persistence in trying and even keeping faith. It also helps us gain more mental strength. If we are continually filled with happiness, life may seems so effortless and we will never be better at it. Joy can not teach us to be daring and calm nor get hold of our feelings.

Our happiness and ability to overcome obstacles in life are closely related. It is obvious that we will feel relief and happy whenever we manage to encounter barrier successfully. The pleasure motivates us to do more bravely in life and get more experience. And, when we fail once or twice, the happiness that we gained before also makes us resilient and start over. Happiness is about being able to make the most of the good times and to cope efficiently with the bad times as we are in a fixed mindset and connect closely with others.