Writing Feedback / Academic IELTS Writing Task 1: Movie Tickets Sales by Genre from 1980 till 2010 [3]

money spent for watching movies in cinemas

Given: The graph below shows the number of movie tickets sold around the world each year from 1980 to 2010. Ticket sales, according to genre, are presented in millions.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

This is my answer (177 words):

The line graph presented illustrates the sum of money, in millions, spent on movie tickets, from 1980 to 2010. The movie ticket sales are grouped according to movie type. The movie types include comedy, action/adventure, documentary, horror, and comedy.

Overall, the sales, with respect to most of the movie types, have increased over the past 20 years. The sales of comedy movie tickets failed to follow this trend, as they presented an overall drop in sales. Past the year 2000, the action/adventure and animation movie tickets showcase the steepest increase in sales.

In terms of sales, action/adventure and animation movies yielded the most in the year 2010 (around 1500 million and 1200 million respectively). Documenary and horror movies also presented an increase in sales however, at a much steady pace.

On the other hand, the sales of comedy movie tickets were gradually dropping from the year 1980 till 2000. In 2010, there was a rebound (from around 390 million to around 590 million). Nonetheless, this rebound in sales was still less than the sales generated in 1980 (around 620 million).

ps. I would really appreciate a rough band score. This is my first attempt and I would like to see were I stand.

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Writing Feedback / Academic IELTS: Writing Task 2: Importance of Planting Trees in Cities and Towns [6]

Some people think that planting trees in open space in cities and towns is more important than building houses. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

more flora in urban areas

My timed (40 min) answer (264 words):

It appears that the public prefers to grow trees rather than residential buildings, in empty spots, in a city or a town, as it is considered of more significance. In my opinion, I agree that trees add greater value to cities and towns.

Firstly, cities and towns are bound to be packed with people and cars which leads to air pollution. Scattering trees around would be the easiest way to create cleaner and fresher air. Not only do they help clean the air, but trees are also a great method to enhance the natural beauty of a city or town. In other words, with cities and towns being over industrialised and urbanised, a glimpse of green spots here and there would never be condemned.

With respect to residential buildings, most cities and towns nowadays utilise apartments rather than houses. Thus, if the population is to expand, apartments may increase their number of floors to accommodate for more residents. This method is in fact less costly when compared building a housing area from scratch.

Another point to consider is the possibility of creating a park. If an empty area is large enough, a park can be created with a variety of trees planted. Such a new spot can produce an influx of visitors, moreover helping the economy of the given city or town.

In conclusion, I think that trees are of a greater value to a city or town when compared with residential buildings. Their presence adds an aesthetically appealing element while also aiding on a practical level with cleaner air and perhaps an improved economy as well.

ps. I would appreciate a rough band score. On another note, I thought my writing and overall ideas presented not on par with my usual writing. I think this was because I timed myself...Thank you in advance!