Posts by nvijai

nvijai

Jun 24, 2018

Writing Feedback / Causes and measures to overcome overweight. [4]

Hello Jea! I think your essay is very effective in persuading why obesity is a problem. There are some things that need to be fixed however. The word "overweight" is improperly used several times. Something like "obesity" would probably work better.

nvijai

Oct 28, 2018

Undergraduate / Why Purdue? I enjoy nothing more than computer science - Supplemental #1 [3]

Hey everyone! I'm applying to Purdue this year, and here is what I have for my first supplemental:

How will opportunities at Purdue support your interests, both in and out of the classroom? (Respond in 100 words or fewer.)

computer science opportunities provided by Purdue

I enjoy nothing more than computer science, and at Purdue, I can finally explore the depths of my passion.

On my college visit to Purdue, I was highly impressed with the vibrancy and diversity that helps foster success. Activities such as the Association of Information Technology Professionals and ACM SIGGRAPH would allow me to diversify my interests. In addition, pursuing organizations such as MiniMake, the Purdue Science

Olympiad Club, and the ITaP Student Software Trainers would help me advance my leadership skills.

Through the computer science opportunities provided by Purdue, I can gain the appropriate skills to better my future.

Could you please let me know if there are any issues with grammar or content? Thank you so much! Also, I am at the 100 word limit.

nvijai

Oct 28, 2018

Graduate / Motivation Statement for a Master Degree in International Development Studies, Norway [3]

Hello! I really like this essay. You truly describe your motivation, your hopes, and your experiences that culminate in why you want to attend this college.

However, is there a word limit? You can probably trim it down, which can actually improve your essay.